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[Hereafter] Chapter XVII: Dragon Witch
🕑 Added 2021-07-08 23:53:21 +0000 UTCIt felt a little anti-climactic. It really did. But there was no reason why Taylor would let things go that easily, so it couldn't be help. Taylor never fights fair, so the instant an opening like that presents itself, she's going to take advantage of that.
For 4700 words, it really didn't cover too much, did it? But it was almost all action, and what wasn't action was narrative justifying the action. It just feels a little weird.
EDIT: Mixed up the trigger for Taylor's magic circuits with Yukio's, so I went back and corrected it. You saw nothing, yeah?
EDIT2: Moving this down a tier. Chapter 18 incoming.
EDIT3: Chapter 19 incoming. Enjoy, everyone.
Comments
Benjamin Lawton
<i>It's better when you realize that Vlad was my original pick for Taylor's Servant.</i> For the very reason I just mentioned, among others? *grins*
Caractacus
Well, Vlad's thoughts are his own. It's not relevant enough to the story, right now, for me to come down for or against your interpretation, so it's definitely valid to look at it from that angle. It's better when you realize that Vlad was my original pick for Taylor's Servant. My editors convinced me to go with Arash for a couple of different reasons.
Benjamin Lawton
Regarding the last paragraph of this chapter, I actually get the feeling that Vlad smirking like that is actually less about condescension, and more genuine respect for Taylor – after all, his whole RL legend was built around facing an enemy too strong to oppose head-on, and thus knowing how to pick and choose your battles. Perhaps a bit romantic on my end, but I actually imagine Vlad to be going, 'So THIS is what it must have been like, facing me from the other side,' right now.
