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[Hereafter] Chapter CXX: Perils of Uncertainty
🕑 Added 2023-09-24 12:16:00 +0000 UTCI got so caught up in Da Vinci's theory that I actually forgot what the original structure was supposed to be for a minute.
It feels a lot like the last few chapters didn't do too much of anything — but then, the whole point was how this thing stretched on for Taylor because she felt helpless and useless, like she was just sitting around and waiting for Ritsuka to die in his sleep. If that's something the readers feel, too, then hey, it got conveyed properly, although it might be a bit of a difficult read when it's spread across weeks like this, huh?
The editor smiled at that one joke and laughed at the end, so everything came out the way I wanted it to.
EDIT: Moving down all the way. 11/05/2023
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Gifted-Monster
Ultimate cockblock by Ritsuka there. Taylor's all ready to go in and then..."Hi guys, I'm back!"
Raphael Mort
Every time EMIYA does something silly, all I can think is "thank god he was summoned by Rika and not Taylor, because the synchronization there would be entirely different the other way"
Vega
Lmao, the anticlimax and the emiya joke were hilarious.
Caractacus
No trouble. I do stuff like that sometimes, too.
Abbi
Ah, I decided to take a more careful review to find it exactly, and I seem to of tripped on a statement that could of been referring to one of two people, one of whom is Da Vinci and the other the likely refered to person, and somehow read half the male pronouns in the rest of the document as refering to Da Vinci. Sorry 'bout that.
Caractacus
No. And they shouldn't be. If they seem to be, then either it's a typo or someone else (like Waver, Romani, or Emiya) is the one actually talking.
Abbi
(Also, thank goodness she wakes up now. Yay!)
Abbi
I haven't noticed such in any previous chapters, though I could of just missed it, so - are Da Vinci's pronouns meant to be changing all the time?
