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B3 - Chapter 6: Linen Duty

🕑 Added 2025-01-23 19:47:30 +0000 UTC

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White Rose

Thanks for the feedback. Book starts are difficult, especially coming back from his Summoning, I felt like a lot of loose threads needed to be dealt with emotionally. Hopefully it reads better in a row, instead of two chapters a week.

Andrew Simpson

Ben is 100% correct that Savage is a dickbag and the emperor would be better off replacing him with one of the A ranks that fell in the line of duty. Critique: These chapters have felt a little... meandering. The tone, events, character's dispositions seem to shift pretty rapidly in a way that makes it feel a little less grounded/believable. Also, How long were they drinking for? If they laughed, cried, and then went back to laughing while sharing stories, It seems like they were drinking for many hours? Who knows.


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