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Cass part 07

🕑 Added 2023-03-16 00:14:56 +0000 UTC

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Robert Brandon Bertilson

No! I wanted her to end up with Neil. Have Neil’s baby.

Violett

Write you here, cause I can't seem to get Discord patreon to work again. Great seeing the finished story arc and I like the ending, it could have a little more, not sure about the right words, doubts? Keeping Isaac on edge. The wedding itself was a little disappointing from Neils and Cass perspective, you could have done more there I think. The whole thing about him fucking her in her wedding dress, possibly staining it or other stuff, staining the holy bride kind of thing, is missing cause you start in the action. What do you think about changing the order a little bit. Keep Isaacs part, it's perfect, but give us a little less of Cass and Neil fucking and more of her waiting in the dress, her doubts, anticipation, horniness, Neil coming in, describing her and how he will take her away and ruining the bride so she has no wedding and than cut to Isaac when she has to decide, shorty before the action, what she will do. Than Isaac waiting, we don't hear her answer, he could perhaps see some details or imagines them. Then we could to the heart attack scene and Cass going to Neil. Keep Cass but let Isaac find an video from Neil/Cass about them fucking before the reception. He sees everything Neil is doing, how they work together after all the time before, the closeness, her sluttyness and its too much for him and back to your story. I think it would give your story more of a buildup from the Cass side and perhaps more of the special setting with the wedding.

R. W.

Wait, did Cass and Plumber Dan team up to murder Neil and hide the body in a PVC barrel that they quickly disposed of? This is my head-cannon ending, haha.


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