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Ch16 script and scribbles
🕑 Added 2022-05-02 17:54:54 +0000 UTCAs promised, here's the working script from chapter 16 - It's not really coherent on its own, as it's ninety-five percent raw dialogue with very little description or stage direction, as it were. I figure all of that out in Photoshop as I lay out pages. There is some trimmed dialogue though, and if it's the kind of thing that interests you you can see how it all gets tweaked from the script to the final page.
Chapter 16 didn't change very much from my initial conception. I think Keon suffered the worst. Originally he got to participate more. He encountered Duane outside the shrine as Duane headed up to the roof, and they fought. Then Keon went and helped Matty and Uaid out against the vliegeng, teaching them how to use FM constructs to evade a vliegeng lunge and warp the khert-lines so they'd crash. Considering how long 16 was even *without* those additions, there just wasn't room for it.
There wasn't much concept art for 16 either. Except for Starfish and Mikaila's looks, everything had already been figured out in previous chapters. But I pulled out some doodles that were mixed in with my chickenscratch. Someone requested Toma/Elka/Quigley, too, and I was happy to oblige. Beware, there is a boob.
If you're of an artistic bent, check out the fanart/fanfic contest over on the site! I know it seems like you have plenty of time, but these breaks can really get away from you~
Comments
Mortiis
I think that depends on where you work
Madison
It's so cool to read the script and note changes made to dialogue, actions, flow. Bail No More had some of that language cranked up to 11 and it really makes it, I think. I also love the change to Duane and Lem's reunion- how Duane mentioning Leysa and Simon leads to Lem remembering Mickie is up there. Ahhh! It hurts.
