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Bring on the Leisure! [Prologue] (Revised)

🕑 Added 2024-02-19 18:30:49 +0000 UTC

Comments

Anthony Glenn

Amazingly good start!

ElectricintheForest

Seriously good job on the rewrite here. Tallum no longer feels like a caricature, but a really person with an inner life. Plenty of space to expand on that moving forward too.

Edward Jeffs

I deeply enjoyed reading this opener as it really brings to bare what I see in your work over others. The depth of character, the descriptions that "show dont tell," and the fluidity of the toughts really draw me into the words. Escaping into the world you created was the greatest joy I have had over the past 7 years.

Whale

I gotta stop writing hate comments man. It’s finally broken the puddle. In all honesty I liked the descriptions of the machine. It really doesn’t feel like they for a lot of people even outside writing.

Conrad Manaugh

Cannot say i dont feel the same way when reading sometimes

PuDDleS4263

I think I need to add a note at the start hahaha. The Prologue IS supposed to be emotional, but please, I'm doing very well.

Tsunami

Did you just provide us a peek behind the curtain? I'm left feeling a bit sad to be honest.

Zaoprimo

it was all of us around 2200-2300 when we screamed for that damned piece of destiny, when everything collapsed and we were out of air and you told us it's all calculated just give me time

PuDDleS4263

I'll look into it, but I'm pretty sure its not a patreon update. They add the links manually.

Zaoprimo

can you update patreon so that I can click next and get the next chapter, without having to go and open 10 chapters and then scroll forward and open another 10 chapters and continue like this in a loop? I know it can be done because I've seen it on other patreon writers