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Comic - How to say no ! (EN) : 70 - 76
🕑 Added 2023-03-26 10:01:00 +0000 UTCHello everyone,
Today, we will continue my new comic "How to say no" with pages 70 to 76 (out of 106)
Very good reading to you and do not hesitate to put a comment and to make me share of your returns!
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Eddie
Hiya, Another few suggestions for the improvement of page 74 Waitress: "Here you go folks. Who is the chorizo pizza for?" Better is -> Waitress: "Here you go folks. Who ordered chorizo pizza?" Zayne: "For her please!" (add a comma) Better is -> Zayne: "For her, please!" Waitress: "I wish you a very good appetite." I suggest rearranging this completely, like this -> Waitress: "Enjoy your dinner. Bon appetite." (The phrase 'Bon appetite' is in my opinion a fairly common used expression in any Western language. What I mean is many people know what it means.) Zayne: "Perfect I thank you!" (add a comma) Like this : Zayne: "Perfect, thank you!" I hope I didn't overloaded you with this, In any case, sorry for that... Cheers
