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SS Chapter 16: The First Task

🕑 Added 2024-10-08 10:53:04 +0000 UTC

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Church22

Your other story flaw in fate while not finished is probably my favorite current Harry Potter fic can only think this story would be better with fem Voldemort as well. Harry’s fixation on Tom especially the way he looks combined with his midnight meet ups with Draco honestly make this read more like a slash fic. I get an obsession to understand Voldemort maybe even emulate him magically cause he was gifted but Harry here seems more like a nieve child with a crush then a cunning and ambitious teen getting ready to change the world. He’s to blunt to impetuous and to unprepared to accomplish what he wants. Revealing himself to Bella threatening Amelia’s niece for all his brilliance he makes far to many stupid mistakes.

Church22

Didn’t really enjoy the first task that much. This Harry is supposed to be cunning and intelligent but the way it happened while magically cool just made him look belligerent especially with the weird calling out to the crowd shit that came after which kind of made him look desperate for attention


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