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Chapter 58 Laying a Trap

🕑 Added 2023-07-11 13:47:22 +0000 UTC
Chapter 58 Laying a Trap

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Robby Cahyadi

Lemme guess, our horse lords are waiting lol

Hanne

thank you. good suggestions ❤️

Michael Klein

"The rocky path was treacherous, but it had sparser tall vegetation and acted like a cobbled road. They moved slowly in their armor and some still had their horses with them." Reads fairly awkward. I would personally rewrite it as "The rocky path was uneven with sparse tall vegetation that acted like a wet cobbled road. The Three Hills Knights and their remaining allies moved slowly in their heavy armor. Those who still had horses guided their mounts through the treacherous terrain." but you do you. It's your story.


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