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Vagabonds Chapter 11
🕑 Added 2022-09-25 13:00:07 +0000 UTCIn Chapter 11, I set about two things.
First: Push Gob to sound like he’s from Brooklyn without saying Brooklyn.
Second: More Mitzi development.
One the first, it’s difficult to do when Brooklyn doesn’t exist, and you’re used to just saying X accent when describing people’s tone of voice. So I opted for onomatopoeia and tried spelling his words out like they’d sound from someone with that accent. The end result is, well, I don’t think it’s good. Rereading it, I understand it. But I wrote the damn thing, even years later I still understand it. I don’t know if new readers would.
As for the second: As I’ve probably said in previous takes on goblin culture, it’s a very mercantile but family oriented styling. Goblins have a lot of kids, and often use those kids to support their business ventures until those kids go off on their own to get others. Plenty of those kids eventually fail, and either move back to their nest to help their parent’s business, or get connections to a sibling’s business. While new ventures are difficult, failing one is looked down upon so there’s a certain level of shame in returning to the nest. But there’s worse shame in never leaving, as well as not finding a venture.
Mitzi didn’t like being under her mother’s shadow providing free labor at the mall she ran. So she left early without a real plan. Probably because stories of Thax’s and Gel’s exploits/hopes intrigued her to push forward. She’s aware they don’t have a good business plan, but she’s more interested in the adventure over getting wealthy, money is just a benefit. But being raised in the culture she was, it still crawls up to bite her. Kind of like how when someone is raised cathlolic they still take some teachings to heart without being religious (speaking from experience I guess).
I don’t know if I did these well, but it was a fun exercise.
