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Peek: Berdol's Notes on the Yard

🕑 Added 2023-07-09 23:28:14 +0000 UTC

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Topaz Moon (Alchemist)

very nice.

Legion42

In the 6th paragraph, did you intend to refer to all of the scions as conduits in the first sentence? Love the look of fresh eyes

JFitz

Also, as a correction, it currently says they can “he engaged in conversation…” I believe that should be “be engaged…”

William Harrison

Hopefully we get Tarl's critique on the notes

Herakilla

Thanks for the peek!

Ethan Barrow

I think they meant to put scions and accidentally put conduits.

MyseriousMage

Yeah pretty sure it is supposed to be "scions" not "conduits" in that spot.

SpagettiSuppeee

Hi, thank you for the peek. I think the start of paragraf 6 is a bit of as the conduit doesnt really talk.

Akylas

Oooo I can't wait to hear the rest of the reports. This sounds like a great way to get a sum up of each place and it's challenges, great peek!


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