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[PSR][Sale] Hekapoo Marco Arc

🕑 Added 2023-01-11 03:21:13 +0000 UTC

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Malkai Wot

I do agree, and certainly not trying to sound mean or anything. It's an easy trap to fall into to use ellipsis more than needed as they tend to feel right in comic writing, but they actually should be used quite sparingly

RubyDead_Queen

I like your stuff, but some criticism, you can't use an ellipsis at the end of every sentence as a replacement for punctuation. It makes a panicking character seem like they have the tone of Darla, disinterested in the everything in and around them. There's a major difference in a character going "Please Glossaryck, you have to help me change back, Star's gone insane trying to get me into a dress..." and "Please Glossaryck, you have to help me change back, Star's gone insane trying to get me into a dress!"

Running Toaster

just keep the submitted text to a single image, there were like at least several images in the last one that could have spawned an image snapshot for that moment in time :3

polonsus

Oh WOW. JUST EPIC. Here the one who commissioned this story. Thank you very much Hero for requesting it in color. And I must add that I have not finished yet, there are a few more to finish the story of Marcapoo. But little by little.