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II-25 Volatile

🕑 Added 2025-06-22 14:52:15 +0000 UTC

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fortyseven

Is that a vague reference to warhammer in the intro? haha

Neuos.t

Damn the world building is amazing here...has some amazing potential. If I'm still tracking properly we haven't even left West Coast USA. Haven't even left the city lmaooo

BerciTheBeast

Is this what you’re doing? Is this what you’re doing? twice

BerciTheBeast

The begging weavers immediately started fleeing up the walls, clambering away from the raging Adept. isnt adam a hero?

BerciTheBeast

“What is that? What is that?” twice

BerciTheBeast

“Yes, it is an instrument meant to torture, meant to inflict permanent harm,” Shiv replied. “Well, it’s not permanent,” Shiv said. both Shiv?

Ekko

Then the young lord looked at you again, did an exaggerated double take, and held out his hands. “Oh, sorry, Unique-Tier. You are Unique. ->Then the young lord looked at Shiv again, did an exaggerated double take, and held out his hands. “Oh, sorry, Unique-Tier. You are Unique.

Ekko

Shiv blinked. “Is that why doesn’t my non-bound equipment doesn’t get rebuilt with me?” ->Shiv blinked. “Is that why my non-bound equipment doesn’t get rebuilt with me?”

Ekko

Valor found himself draw to Shiv’s lingering wound again. “Shiv, remain still. I wish to see if I can to extract the withering from you.” ->Valor found himself draw to Shiv’s lingering wound again. “Shiv, remain still. I wish to see if I can extract the withering from you.”

Ekko

Valor drifted back. “Ah, a Severing Whip. You know what that is?” “Yes, it is an instrument meant to torture, meant to inflict permanent harm,” Shiv replied. ->Shiv drifted back. “Ah, a Severing Whip. You know what that is?” “Yes, it is an instrument meant to torture, meant to inflict permanent harm,” Valor replied.

Tock Blue

Tyftc. I think you might be closing a lot of narrative doors by having uniques be that rare, by having inertium be that rare, by having the ratio of necromancy power to reaction be that high. Could be worth a revision or two. The first two make it feel like there are fewer and fewer doors to unlock to meaningfully challenge the MC, especially with support. the third makes the thus-far pretty incredible forethought his parents showed... actually not-credible. Sending him off into the world with all the tools he'd need...to die permanently the first time he encountered a telepath or necromancer. Pyschomancers seem dime a dozen, but ditto necros until this chapter

Brent Stinebaker

I know authors that use subtext and they're all cowards

Reversity

Shiv blinked. “Is that why doesn’t my non-bound equipment doesn’t get rebuilt with me?” Something doesn't right.

Reodude

Love the story and the chapter. But that's a massive coincidence just as they were talking about stormhilt haha. Something a few chapters have a little, maybe the connections can be more subtle?


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