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SB: Chapter 119 – Interlude 14

🕑 Added 2025-09-22 18:45:02 +0000 UTC

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신현준

Gracias

Mister Vii

It is the end of an era. Starting chapter 121, you will get nice shiny chapters.

Cirex123

an editor? aw, no more „togeather“ and „boarder“, honestly I will miss these.

Touch

Edit(suggestion) Not gonna lie I think author could paraphrase or generally include more descriptions of the scenes and thoughts, for example: Oh, there was a farm ahead of me. - “As I ran, a number of small hut emerging from the horizon” is sooo much better, knowing it’s a hut or it is small or how far it is just increase that much detail Once I found it, I would punish it *a bit* - Legend Xanatos does NOT look like someone who would use the word *a bit*, he WOULD punished it, delete the word *a bit* would show more of his decisiveness and ruthlessness I had someone watching at a distance and the fact that he had gone into the dungeon with that healer could only be for one reason. - that’s a REALLY long thought, and I don’t think most people think in terms as “I hired this people” but more like “this people was hired by me” no? Paraphrasing it to “The spy/people I sent reported that he had gone into…” Would put more emphasis and focus on the spy and Mc, not focusing on “I think” “I sent” which seems more appropriate in this context


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