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A Prince of House Targaryen Chapter 12 (A Prince of The North)

🕑 Added 2022-04-06 18:48:24 +0000 UTC

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Drinor

I will rewrite a few parts to make the chapter better. Thanks for reading my Story

Chris Prevou

Interesting but honestly it's entirely too confusing for jumping around so much. I don't mind for storytelling purposes but at least try to mark some timeframe, like this makes so little sense, we have jumped around decades it feels like with Jon being barely 2 to being 5 to being older than 5 back to him being young, I mean just a general timeline and maybe smoothening that out some would make this story so much more enjoyable. Even if just a short expose from the character of how old they are would work.also, Patience, not patients, that's two different things. Love the story premise though. It's really nice to see world building instead of just jumping to the end, though I'm thoroughly confused at this point about what has happened when.

LittleHowy

I love the story and I can't wait until canon starts! Though the major Catelyn abuse and bashing I see coming in the future is a bit much in my opinion. I would like to see her put in her place eventually, but in a way where she's still married to Ned and part of the family. Either way great work. Keep Writing!


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