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Long Live the Emperor: Chapter 14

🕑 Added 2022-08-28 15:00:07 +0000 UTC

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Loukemia

I enjoyed this chapter even with Alvin tripping over himself trying Romance novel lines. Now we just need Clover to tell him to just be himself. Or Mabel could discover him and Clover forcing him to tell the truth about himself.

Michael Jackson

Been there done that, just listen to her and dont turn the story toward yourself unless she asks about you, poor mabel through shes a battle addict and wants a swordsman as a partner, get her to teach him the sword so she falls for him (he could feign memory loss from a bump on the head for this and his changed personality).

DiabolicalGenius

Well like you said, it's a good way to help establish his character and tendency to overthink things when he finally spurs himself into action. A little cringe is fine as long as it's what the character would actually do and it gets a appropriate response. Also helps if it's a little humorous when it does happen. So long as he only messes up occasionally like this and is capable most of the time, then it's not a problem. Plus his overdoing it will might help when it comes to magic and such.

Marvin

I'm trying to nail Alvin as a slacker when allowed to take it easy, but also someone who tries way too hard when they actually get going. Sometimes trying way to hard is a bad thing, sometimes a good thing (to be seen later). We'll see how it works out. If it was super cringy to read I might remove it, but it was fun to write and (hopefully) amusing to read.

DiabolicalGenius

That's was painful to watch. I'm guessing Al has little experience wooing women back on earth? Cos even in real life, there's plenty of stuff in books and film that women gush over, but wouldn't know how to react if a man imitated it in real life. Talking to the girl and getting to know what she likes tends to be effective, regardless of the world you're in. So long as you possess some degree of face to face social skills (unlike me). All I can do is give him an A for effort. That carriage arrival hooks us nicely though. Whether it's good or bad is the question. Let's hope Clover didn't get their attention.


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