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Long Live the Emperor: Chapter 21

🕑 Added 2022-09-21 15:00:11 +0000 UTC

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Marvin

True. I stress a lot about my books not being as good as I want them to be, though!

Marvin

Yeah, maybe. Writing stuff very spur of the moment and promising myself I'll fix it up later is much easier, faster, and less stressful on me.

Justin Webb

Also you could write more books like this the have a editor fix it up.

Justin Webb

Do you think Eric valll and Logan Jacobs books are all great works some are only passable other are pretty good sometimes you just have to write and new story the best you can and put it out, even if it's not perfect

Loukemia

I've been enjoying the story as is. I don't mind a slow burn. I'd think the end of the book and the next might have more scenes as we add characters. If you do desire to add some earlier scenes Clover becomes the obvious choice. Though the maid also jumps to mind. If Mabel has an entourage one her friends,maid,or personal guard may be more aggressive in their desires. Aldrich seems like a himbo so if he had interacted with her entourage before Alvin took over that person might want to rekindle that relationship.

DiabolicalGenius

Well, that was covered up surprisingly smoothly. As for sex, it made sense for there not to be much yet. Be little cautious with Clover until he was sure he wasn't dealing with some kind of succubus trying to drain the life out of him or enslave him was a good idea, and Mabel would respond better to being romanced before being seduced. She's already responding very well, so slowly becoming intimate and going through the steps from casual physical contact, kissing and then taking her to bed, a day at a time works well. Can't give too solid an opinion on Amazon without seeing what you're struggling with. I'll just say that I liked how things went in the first draft and wouldn't bother with dramatic changes unless you KNOW you've got something that would work better. But no matter what, have FUN with it. If it's not something that's giving you any enjoyment writing, then you'll end up finding some excuse to write other things and never come back to it in the end. Stressing out is fine so long as you're still looking forward to writing the story once you've got the kinks out. That's all I think on the matter. Thanks for the general update on things!

Michael Jackson

Not really arsed about the sex scenes just yet the story is developing more organically so when he feels safer than this point and hes got most things in a stabler position i would say a good romp in the hay with mabel and clover would be in order. As to taking time with amazon i thought it was quite good to start with and refreshingly different, me personally i like slice of life harem and not so much fight fight learn shag repeat, i like to see the development of the main character from what we see as civilised to a more rugged survivalist, after all it has been said that we are nine meals away from being savages.


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