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Long Live the Emperor: Chapter 23

🕑 Added 2022-09-26 15:00:10 +0000 UTC

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Michael Jackson

Or aldrich got hit by truck kun and is in a coma and alvin has no way back to our world or he could run fowl of the law perhaps killing someone with a sword . I do like this and seeing the writing evolve, maybe alvin could hijack his old body now and again and get things from aldrich like sword arts or read up on great generals of our world and maybe use our tech to upgrade the other world or defeat the bad guys .

Loukemia

Not tired, but this seems like a natural stopping point as well. Maybe have an epilogue with Aldrich in Alvin's body out of jail and shacked up with a dream girl (or two) thinking about how glad he doesn't have to deal with (future character named here). I look forward to these next chapters and the rewrite (and the next book if/when you decide to swing back).

Marvin

Thanks for the feedback. I will probably stop soon, but I did write a few more chapters past this earlier today, so we will at least go through that backlog. I understand if you guys are starting to get tired of the story though and want to move on to something else.

Loukemia

I think this is a good stopping point. If you go further the only thing I could think of would be the wedding itself but that might need some build up as it's a good place for intrigue magical or otherwise. So if you wait to use that as s main plot point in book 2 that would be great. I'd rather wait then see a rush that loses some of the potential story.

Marvin

I appreciate the though! I do hate wasting a lot of time writing, but I am curious if doing a full first draft like this will improve my writing any. We’ll see!

DiabolicalGenius

Well, as long as it's not more than 20k it should be fine. I just wanna avoid seeing you write most of a novel then having to stop and watch you start again from the beginning. That would be frustrating. That's all.

Marvin

To be honest, I have no idea what I’m doing. I was just hoping I could get this version to something close enough to an ending that we’d all be satisfied if I left it there until it was viable for me to rewrite. I’m hoping I can achieve that in no more than 20k more words for this draft. If it takes more than that though, I may just hold off and wait for the rewrite.

DiabolicalGenius

It's a cliff, but at the same time is it really a cliff if you're rewriting the series from here? Or are we continuing the first draft a little longer? I wouldn't say no to seeing a little more of where this could have gone but at the same time I don't wanna get too invested if we're going to start over sooner or later. Of course, this could also be leading to a situation much like the start you planned for the redone version. With Al retaining the barony through marrying Mabel, but with the count planning to get rid of him after she has an heir. Making use of him on the battlefield until them would be efficient and make it easier to assassinate him and make it look like death in battle. So maybe you're planning to keep this up for a while to try out some of your ideas in that area?


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