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Amazon Apocalypse 2: Chapter 72

🕑 Added 2023-12-03 16:00:02 +0000 UTC

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jmundt33a

Hey, they were talking. They were part of Knuckles’ crew. Possible to convince.

jmundt33a

When you have Knuckles possessive it should be Knuckles’. You have Knuckle’s twice like his name is Knuckle. Should be rough-looking Should be heavyset Should be rank and file. Gruesome instead of bleeding. C is disassembled, there’s not enough together to actively bleed though it is covered in blood. Probably roused instead of raised. Should be watchtower. Like the Dylan or Hendrix song. You have “but it was already too late” in consecutive sentences. Maybe adjust one of them. You have “one of the Taskmaster’s”. Eliminate the apostrophe. Should be from my men, not of. His men told him the stories or he overheard them. They aren’t stories about his men. Should be prison population or population of prisoners.

NovaZero

LOL he's still trying to get them to surrender. I mean come on 😄


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