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Amazon Apocalypse Extras: Book 2, Chapter 71 (Old version)

🕑 Added 2023-12-10 16:00:04 +0000 UTC

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NovaZero

She's not doe-eyed or enchanted, I was thinking it works on the opposite sex or whoever is interested. I figured she has more abilities/skills so Kerrie being concerned didn't stick out to me - he hasn't told anyone what he suspects so this way I'm quite liking how it turns out. I'm guessing the end bit was intended to be in the next chapter? Like I said in the previous draft, if he was "oh... Shit" it would have been fine I guess? This version he's suspecting it but not voicing it. Carter not communicating actively based on suspicion alone isn't bad... I imagine they'll all be much more wary in future encounters even with possible friendlies but yeah overall I think this works out so much better.

jmundt33a

Kerrie isn’t directly affected, but she’s still fooled. We’re also seeing Lisette summoning thralls for defense. Also, the multiple passes on Examine is similar to the multiple passes to create the Master Artificer book from the two other items. Hmm, interesting.

Marvin

Mostly just the encounter at the gates, right?

NovaZero

Yeah, I actually much prefer this version.


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