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Amazon Apocalypse 2: Chapter 89 (Epilogue)

🕑 Added 2023-12-28 18:00:08 +0000 UTC

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Worlok

Adding Cyra could be fun. Also it puts carter and his girls in a position to better thwart Thalassa’s plans and it puts better advisors on Cyra’s side. She needs help as a ruler or she will end up a puppet for Thalassa.

Marvin

I've had a few people strongly in favor of getting Cyra, and a few people strongly against. I'm going to wait until this book comes out to decide. It it's really that polarizing maybe not.

George

I am curious if Carter ends up with Cyrus as well…. I feel like that’s been hinted at some and that seems like the most likely direction based on the way the antagonist is moving things.

jmundt33a

That's a great epilogue teaser. Sets up a variety of opponents for Book 3. In a lot of ways, Thalassa seems just like Kyrina, only worse. Her detailed autocracy is exactly the thing Carter wants to avoid. And the description of her son sounds just like a guy born on third who thinks he hit a triple. An exquisitely hateable villain. I wonder if Thalassa even has support for the wild west she keeps claiming all the Elders want. And her hypocrisy is also delicious.

jmundt33a

Possibly owned and controlled by her? Maybe swill for drivel? Swill usually refers to beverages and drivel to ideas or conversation. Maybe swap except for other? You have on display and displaying in the same sentence. Maybe swap depicting for displaying? "each depicting the great victories..." You have powerful and power in the same sentence. Maybe switch aura for power? Hmm. Beneficial and benefits in consecutive sentences? Maybe swap in advantages for benefits? Don't know if that's an improvement. "Our sons often inherit their father's traits." Hmm. Neither of them are exclusive. Are married Amazons monogamous? If not, it should probably be fathers' traits. Should be "the other Elders and I" Is she talking about the Elders ruling their factions as they pleased? Or the factions being able to rule their territory without restraint? Seems like a mix of both. Maybe "Her frequent absence allowed us to rule our factions as we pleased." Frequent absence could be frequent absences, but that feels like Bueller hair-splitting. Maybe add a comma after now. Easy and easily in consecutive sentences. Probably fine. Could swap out simple for easy. "defeating her should be simple" Has Cyra crossed into C grade already? His death knight pitch needs and adjustment. What about something like: "We're in the process of creating death knights. We've been killing warriors of the Sandswept Plains to fill out their ranks, but..." Otherwise it's unclear if Morgathor is talking about filling out the Serpent Lodge's ranks with death knights or filling out the death knights' ranks with a different warrior fodder source. Maybe "After all, that's the basis of your plan to use our son to take over the main family." Or "That's the basis of your plan to use our son to take over the main family, isn't it? (or keep after all at the end of the question)


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