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Amazon Apocalypse 5: The Story So Far...

🕑 Added 2024-12-22 17:59:49 +0000 UTC

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Marvin

Full sister. I probably would have made them half sisters or adoptive sisters if I'd known Cyra was going to join the harem. Ah well. Best laid plans and all that.

Chris

is she her full sister or just half?

Marvin

I figure I just won't rub it in or have them in the same sex scene and I should be reasonably safe.

jmundt33a

Oookaay. Playing off the last name as clanshare.

Marvin

Lowkey, I've been trying to downplay that fact a bit.

jmundt33a

You forgot to mention that Cyra is Myrina’s big sister.

jmundt33a

Is integration supposed to be capitalized?

jmundt33a

Raised and grew up are overlapping synonyms. Should be Another was Should be pitted. Should be all the foes. You’re missing a noun. You have pit us against in consecutive paragraphs. Potentially could seem repetitive. Should be I promised I think it should be at my sid. I think Reluna might be an instance where on my side works better You just say the tournament winner without introducing it. Wording seems a little odd. Maybe a missing phrase or sentence


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