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Amazon Apocalypse 5: Chapter 18

🕑 Added 2025-02-03 16:00:17 +0000 UTC

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jmundt33a

This was a great meeting. We’ve met Mimiko and know why she doesn’t seem like a candidate, but it was a full intro and the audience has a good grasp of her character.

jmundt33a

Words missing. That was already? What?? Too late? Futile? Is resistor the right word? It’s a storage and conversion root, isn’t it? Should be that sect’s parent sect. Not that parents’ sect Maybe at the first opportunity? Fascinating twice in three sentences. Maybe swap out intriguing for one of these? In front of, not before. Maybe hold still.

Darius Sanguna

So far I very much appreciate the lack of high stakes/tension scenes. Maybe make B5 just a catch up book to tie up all the plot lines you started and haven't managed to finish. Not every book needs a miniboss to defeat with its own arc and all that shebang.

Marvin

Could be. I have to see where they fit. I don’t want to slow down this part of the story too much, since it might already feel a bit slow.

NovaZero

I think tension progression is fine with the way it is, there's enough catharsis that narrative fatigue isn't a concern yet.

Mistweaver

Thank you!

NovaZero

It's refreshing that he doesn't learn the mystical art of bullshitsu that comes with cultivagueion.

SiI3nt

Wouldn't a few more time skips large and small during this war, depending how long you want to drag out this arc help towards incorporating the jade goddess sooner? Wouldn't it also be useful for there to ever so convenient horde of monsters and evil evil doers.

SiI3nt

He could do a to array for one and expand on that as a start maybe and go from there

Marvin

We will hopefully check in with her when Carter returns to Earth. I could do another POV scene with her, but I try to keep non-MC POV scenes to 5% of the book max, so I dole those out very sparingly.

Mistweaver

Personally, I’m happy with how the book is going so far. More action is always nice, but only if it advances the story. Spending some time to have Carter learn the differences between the System and cultivation would be interesting. Also, how are things going with Reluna?

Marvin

He could eventually. He'd have to sit down and figure it out how to make such a large array first, though. And maybe contact Thulga to trigger it from her end, since teleportation arrays in this setting aren't automatic. They require a skilled technician with a dedicated job.

Adam

At this rate, couldn’t Carter just make his own teleportation array?

Julian Lachner

Bringin some depth back into both if them, like a date. Or what became of their class and race. some fighting together (maybe after the war when they reach B-Grade)

Marvin

No, only Cyra is B-Rank.

Marvin

Like what? Checking in with Bridget and Sakura? They’re around supporting the army.

jmundt33a

Should be I was leading an auxiliary unit I was an auxiliary unit is missing some words. Should be that could send. Not led Should be as I feared they would be Should be long way Should be they were some of or they were two of Should be I might even have taken Maybe the last thing I wanted was or I knew the last thing I’d want Combine the two sentences. I could still get her to talk if Maybe eventually instead of sooner or later.

Julian Lachner

Some info about his harem would be incredible

Corac

Don't worry to much about the tension building. It already is. It's a slow burn type thing. It's just as enjoyable for some of us watching the world building. It makes me fall further into the story and makes the eventual fights and tension you do build up that more impactful.

xerxes

The Eternal Spring Sect wants to "liberate" Ladwick and the area around Ladwick from the system. The sect leaders don't care about the people living in the sector, they just hate the system and think it is unnatural.

Indigo

Ok course because what else could he be other than an old monster who got bored and decided to infiltrate the system because the barbaric system could never do something so advanced

Tommy

The only part I am missing over all so far is a lack of updates/involvement of the harem. Did they reach B rank as well?

ArbabSB

Lmao the genesis of Carter's future magitek utopian realm: an inaccessible teleportation array.

WhiteRabbit

Ohhh, that would be fun

ArbabSB

A useful explanation of cultivation for someone like me who's avoided cultivation stories like the plague thus far. Thanks. The pagoda spaceships provide an amusing mental image. I'm interested to see what Carter can implement from this knowledge into his own magic or his aethermsithing. Perhaps devices to harvest kindling energy and refine it into stat-granting items like those jade pieces, more efficient experience pearl creation, improvements to the System infrastructure he created in his pocket realm? And improvements to his power armor and golems? Also a good idea to implement timeskips given we are getting a ways into the book. Carter has a lot on his plate. At least he's not stuck arguing with Legates Moron and Abysmal all the time. Wonder why Herius took the teleportation array instead of leaving it at their main base? Maybe he's worried about desertions? Goddess in Jade's sect mentioned. Wonder what they want with Ladwick? Their idealism didn't stop them from allying with the Black Beast Sect after all.

Detectivetrap23

“Occasionally, these schools would recruit a farmer’s son or nobleman’s daughter with an open spiritual root to become a cultivator” I’m looking at you lady Velicia Also those construction workers are never going home. They’ll build an entire city for 20 times their normal pay by the time the campaign is over

zombies wolking

Anyone else feel like she’s going to start a sect dedicated to him similar to the jade goddess?


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