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First Pages of the Comic
🕑 Added 2022-09-17 18:25:47 +0000 UTCAlright, I know I said a few days. But after I sat down to figure this thing out, I honestly got completely lost with the way I want to approach it.
Like I got a bunch of puzzle pieces scattered around and simply couldn't find the one that fits.
Had to sleep on it a couple of times to get something coherent in my head.
Now, I'm still pretty nervous to post it because this type of content is just deep unknown woods for me. And I would really like to hear your thoughts on it.
Any good faith criticism, pointing to mistakes, or praise would be very appreciated. I might revisit and change these pages if necessary.
I know there is no real smut yet but it will come, I want also to try to make it look "cool" and not just horny dumb shit.
I'm already working on the next page and I promise it will come waaaay sooner.
Okay, Thank you as usual!
Comments
Article V
Suggested edits for better clarity: Page 1: "Just as before, it's now the spider's duty to stitch existence back together. So..." Page 2: "Not even a kitten stuck in a tree."
Lobster29
Guilty, man, have faith in yourself. I think you’re doing great. I love the comic style so far, and I really do like the details you’ve got, including that 65.4 (nice) and the two lollipop licking frames (get that sexual tension rolling). I guess like what others have said, as long as the model and the sex scenes r great, we’d all be happy bout it and I think we all have faith in your ability to make this comic great! Also, I’d expect some juicy hardcore 69 scenes since the comic is taking place on Earth-65.4. Anyway, we all trust you and you got this, Guilty! Keep it up!
RiffRaff
Looks really good. The 3D effect on the message text is a little disorientating. But overall it's hitting the comic book style
JBlume
It also flows and reads well too
JBlume
I really like the wide artistic variety such as the lollypop circles and the cell phone ding. Very different without being too loud or "look at me, I'm doing my own thing!"
SPARK352
I'm hoping for some oversized venom cock in Gwen as well 🤗🥰
Kay Bee Baby
This looks awesome, like the way the speech bubbles are integrated.
The RadishGod
i like how she is in normal outfit and not in a hentai world where everyone dresses always sexily. it takes away of the scenes if the clothes are always like that.
The RadishGod
i just hope for oversized cocks in her like venom! :D
Guilty
Thanks, I do care and I'll try my best to deliver. It's practically my first written story so some clumsiness may be there.
Angelo
Perfect 👌
Guilty
Fixed!
oogieboogie
i dig it. the style, the coloring of the text and stuff, it's appealing to the eye. obviously the models look good, but you knew that. the overall style and sex will be the main thing, but if you care about story, just remember the flow should be, "something happens, therefore some else happens as a consequence." don't go for an "and then, and then, and then." just my $0.02.
Guilty
Thank you! I guess my English and typo corrector failed me. Gonna fix it
Angelo
Seems pretty good so far. I like that you're keeping her in character and it's not just straight-up cheesy porn dialogue.Page 2 has a typo on the first thought box. "And after all the apologies and promises that *we're* gonna get it back together." "we'd get it back together" would also work. Also not sure what band repetition is. Is that meant to be band practice?
General Amador
My god this is amazing. I love the whole dynamic as well as all the bright colors and the details. I can’t wait to see how it all plays out. You never cease to amaze Guilty. 🤗
