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Book 1 - Lesson 18: "Curse the enemy with your dying breath!"

🕑 Added 2023-04-27 22:32:36 +0000 UTC

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Rowan Neill

I'm not sure if what I'm suggesting is any good, but what if you added the beginning? Like, last encounter (before you stalled me for 2 whole chapters you monster!) we ended with Alpha charging into the fray. Suddenly it's mid-fight. Seems a bit discordant in my opinion. We didn't get any buildup of "Oh shit! What's that thing?! No matter! I shall smite it with my all-mighty Smiter! *Dong* Egads! It has no effect! What is this thing?!" And then they kiss!... I mean fight! Yeah definitely that one.


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