page one , panel 1 e 2
🕑 Added 2020-10-09 23:44:47 +0000 UTCyo, almost finishing the first page.
halp with the text. is there something wrong or weird?
Comments
Mario E Young
Everybody needs a proofreader. Also writing in a second language is super tough, and you did super awesome at it!
Gizzy LeChat
True.
Vigilant Satyr
If English isn't your native language, even if it is, no need to worry. It's a fucked up language because it follows other languages into dark alleys, beats them up, and takes what it wants from them.
Gizzy LeChat
Lance has a nicer ass now, hurry up and get another chapter done
Void Nosferatu
FUCK! every sentence was wrong! haha
Gizzy LeChat
Awesome, didn't his butt get bigger, not like I mind.
"before she comes back"
Mario E Young
If my warm cum wasn’t there as proof, I would never believe I had just fucked him!
Mario E Young
“What an amazing ass!”
Mario E Young
“Maybe you should hurry up and change those pants before she gets back.”
Think it should be "mom" instead of "mon", and the text looks a bit odd, center alignment might help