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Tides from the Deep - Chapters 31-40
🕑 Added 2024-09-14 09:52:09 +0000 UTCChapter 31 – Tempest Water
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Cinera Verinia
Again, I feel like Fiora has been given a very raw deal. From the very beginning Captain Tulo's punishment felt far too excessive for her crime. And Fiora being mean to Talia by laughing at her really doesn't deserve such retribution, especially when Fiora was retaliating at Talia physically lashing out at her. Like this feels like authorial fiat dedicated to straining Fiora and Talia's relationship.
Touch
Clearly MC need more intelligence stats, her arrogance and lack of basic emotional intelligence/ thinking of consequences disgust me, not to mention always timely insertion of her “mother”
Everett Christensen
"He didn’t miss no target at the twenty-foot line. How is it he doing this? Fiora swore internally." I was going to wait to catch up before rolling out the critique but this grammar hurt too much.
