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[BTS] Work From Home Outline
🕑 Added 2022-02-13 16:01:01 +0000 UTCI've shown you two scripts now, but I thought this week I'd take a step back even further in my development process to the outline stage. If I'm working on something large scale (in this case a multi-panel, multi-part story) I like to have a bird's eye view. It's not as detailed, there's no dialogue, and I haven't even broken out the individual panels yet, but it does give you a good sense of the beats of the story and where things end up. As always, please comment or Like if you'd enjoy seeing this get made to a full comic.
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Work From Home
Part I
- In an office, it is the last day before work from home takes affect for their company—Jeremy, Lillian, and Sarah all are talking.
- Jeremy says he's going to try and workout more, with clear chemistry between Sarah and Jeremy.
- Lillian pipes up that she too will workout. She asks for some workout recommendations, though Sarah is initially dismissive. Nevertheless, Sarah mentions the app that she is using—both Jeremy and Lillian write it down.
- Jeremy and Lillian don't live too far away from each other, as they walk home they have a cute, albeit awkward conversation
- They stop at Lillian's door, saying goodbye
- Jeremy comes home, wondering if he and the girls will actually be able to stick to the workout goals
- Lillian is in her house, scrounging for weights.
- She tries to do some of the exercises, but she struggles and becomes disheartened.
- Sarah lives in a nice house. Already in WFH she finds herself bored
- Rather than working out, she sits on the couch, watching TV and eating some chips.
Part II
- On a conference call, Lillian, Jeremy, and Sarah are talking about projects. It is immediately obvious that Sarah has put on some weight—namely in her breasts. They are talking about a project, but Jeremy has trouble concentrating. He doesn't really even notice that Lillian is undergoing her own transformation—hers much more fitness oriented.
- When Jeremy gets off the call, Sarah and Lillian discuss fitness.
- Lillian does a bicep pose, which really throws Sarah off, she wasn't expecting Lillian to see such improvements in such a short time!
- As Sarah gets off the computer, she looks at herself in the mirror
- She admires her figure, especially her breasts
- Sarah realizes though that she can't let Lillian outclass her after she made fun of her, panel ends with her wondering where she left her weights.
- Lillian on the other hand is all positivism, she's in her workout clothes and is using clearly stronger weights than before. Lillian is doing dumbbell curls
- She finishes up the dumbbell curl with clear muscle definition
- Lillian sits down and marks on her mobile app her workout progress.
- Jeremy gets a ping on his phone notifying him from the app of Lillian's progress. He is shocked!
Part III
- All three are on a conference call again, but this time Lillian and Sarah feign internet issues, they aren't able to get on their call, leaving Jeremy very confused.
- Sarah watches Jeremy and thinks about how puny he is, though she is anxious about how big Lillian might be.
- Lillian is shown to be working out with her headphones on as she speaks. She isn't comparing herself to anyone.
- As the call ends, she mildly blushes when Jeremy mentions missing seeing her face.
- Jeremy gets off the call and wonders if he should go check on Lillian, if she's having internet issues he might be able to help after all.
- Lillian is working out in her backyard, her heavy physique on full display.
- Jeremy peeks over the fence, catching a glimpse, his eyes wide in shock.
- Lillian looks up, but he has disappeared before she could catch him in the act.
- Lillian rises, showing off her body to the viewers, glistening and chiseled.
- Jeremy is texting a picture to Sarah, shocked. Sarah is flabbergast and now definitely needs to step up her game.
- Sarah is holding some protein powder, having found her heavier weights. She's ready.
Part IV
- Lillian is lying in bed, partially naked. We get a good view of her impressive physique. Her phone buzzes.
- Lillian looks over her app and is shocked to see that Sarah's stats how nearly doubled in almost no time at all
- Cut to Sarah, she is using some sort of growth serum
- Sarah hits the weights hard
- We see some impressive growth
- Sarah finishes her rep with even more growth
- Sarah is about to hop in the shower, with one last indulgent glance at her body in the mirror
- Shot of Sarah enjoying the shower and her body.
- As Sarah gets out of the shower she sends a text message inviting Lillian and Jeremy over to celebrate the success of their WFH shift
- Sarah is in her closet trying on dresses, she picks a particularly slinking red one.
Part V
- Lillian is waiting outside the door while Jeremy is walking up. Lillian hasn't spotted him yet, but Jeremy is definitely checking Lillian out—he can't believe his eyes!
- He and Lillian have awkward small talk
- Sarah opens the door, to shock them all with her massive size.
- Lillian asks if she can use the bathroom, which Sarah doesn't mind at all; it gives her some alone time with Jeremy, which makes Jeremy nervous.
- Lillian is walking down a hallway when she spots the growth serum.
- Lillian holds the growth serum, debating if she should take it.
- She hears Sarah flirting with Jeremy in the main room, solidifying her decision to take it.
- She maybe takes a bit too much.
- Jeremy stops in, with Lillian quickly hiding the growth serum behind her back. Jeremy was concerned she'd gotten lost.
- Lillian and Sarah lock eyes as she comes back into the main room. The game's a foot.
Comments
The Commodore
Wow great premise for a story
Kilyaeden
Really like the idea of it
