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v4c21: Observations

🕑 Added 2023-06-25 05:26:54 +0000 UTC

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Net

I truly loved that chapter

Dirk Gent Lee

I keep coming back to read this, it’s such a wonderful chapter

Aune

on the bright side of things, guess there will be no weekly break next month x D

Timothy Dana

If bi de had a theme song… https://youtu.be/miomuSGoPzI

John D Jones

But not necessarily defecation. There's a reason Ri Zu carries injectable laxatives.

Svein Ove Aas

Cooperation always beats defection in the end ~

Old Dog

Yes, usually late.

Z H

Nah, Ri zu is already in this scene, she even struck first by taking our Jipeng

Z H

Ah so that "F" wanted to go see the fight too and left its proper place. That beat down was so thorough it broke the 4th wall!

Z H

That's just how hard the Fulmination Squad was getting beaten, they knocked an extra "f" out of them!

Guy L.

All I'm thinking of is that scene between Simon and Jayne in the infirmary on Firefly

Aune

a smackdown, or maybe this Senior sister comes blazing with her intent, pinning everyone down at the apex of their 'victory'. and as the healer leader dude decides to 'wait & see' how Ruzi handle this turn of events. The Rat turned human goes all Healing mode, seeing her hidden injuries by an obscure poison/or 'normal' hidden ones, or womanly things ' i can't speak about it to others' kinda deal which Ruzi bring up to turn the table. whooooo knows

Robert Davidson

They are wrong to assume all foxes must be evil, but they are not evil themselves. And the Foxes weren't squeaky clean either, most likely.

WolfKnight22

I cant wait for the next part this is gonna be hilarious

Spade ♠️ Dragon

Good of you, standing with your fellow mages

BlueMage_VT

Never piss off the white mage(s)! 🤣

Len

Her needs to be removed and a comma after records

John D Jones

The important part of this is that it doesn't precisely arise out affection for Ru Zi herself (though there's probably some of that as well). These are doctors, medical professionals who live and work in a very high pressure, high stress situation. Ri Zu's organization makes that work a little easier. Her tea and biscuits/cookies/etc helps these people relax and decompress a little. If you try to fuck with that, to take Ri Zu away and make their lives harder again? Those caring but angry doctors will destroy you.

Old Dog

I hate it when I forget to post. As always, thank you for the chapter. I found where that stray "f" belongs: In the privacy of his own room, the corner of his lips twitched into a smile (F)or a brief moment before it dropped.

Nef Mccrimmon

Yhe maid of the white mages is op

Michael Fannon

They done goofed. You don't ever fuck with the white mage, much less a whole group of them.

Purple Floof

The editors need to comb over this one again

Yet, to his surprise... he didn’t actually need to intervene. A flash of light and a clap like thunder erupted from the man who looked a bit like a monkey. The charge of the f Fulmination Squadron faltered. (weird spacing here and a random free floating F?)

Truedragon5374

I enjoyed reading that SM is not 100% thuggish evil. For all its flaws, SM does do good for the people under their protection. Plus the idea of a bunch of Spiritual Doctors (in a pavilion full of potentially poisonous substances no less) smacking down the local bully squad is hilarious!

Seaspike

Anyone else get the email notification 12 hours late?

Chichi son

Yet, to his surprise... he didn’t actually need to intervene. A flash of light and a clap like thunder erupted from the man who looked a bit like a monkey. The charge of the f Fulmination Squadron faltered. Extra letter and line break? He had tracked her progress and though she focused on the expected her records he noticed a particular pattern in her behavior. I'm not sure what you meant here but the phrasing is awkward

Chichi son

To me he seems like this story's version of Draco Malfoy a villain barely worth the title who is also comic relief

Logrus

To be fair, Xianxia uses the hapless-villain-as-comic-relief trope very often.

V01D

“to any one of the Fulmination Squadron’s blades it cut them in two” - AS it cut them in two? “OR a brief moment” - I think you’re missing an F “Elder Shenher” - wasn’t this ‘Shenhe’?

RJKY

Jipeng: The Impotent Shitter.

WolfKnight22

GLORIOUS I SAY HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA

Dwayne Parker

I wish I could heart this twice.

V01D

And Ri Zu shows the power of Being Proactive!

Featherweight

Jipeng was told in no uncertain terms to back off Ri Zu by an elder. I expect the Consequences for a Successful attempt would be worse than those he earned in failure. Ri Zu is doing this goon a favour.

Old Dog

As always thank you for the chapter. Love how Ri Zu is working out. Your editors missed the hick-up: "The charge of the f Fulmination Squadron faltered."

James Paparella

Jipeng is the reoccurring villain? I don't know... he seems to be walking a fine line between villain and comic relief to me, his encounters with Rizo have been so one-sided. I imagine her rolling her eyes in annoyance before each encounter.

linkhyrule5

> “That… ha! Won't work on me for a second—ghak!” Sure sounds like it's working fine a second time to me :V. Glorious.

Cj

You’d think the examiner would learn better than to start shit with a spiritual Dr after experiencing why you shouldn’t three times.

Geese

I believe Yun Ren disguised himself to either look like his brother or share similar monkey features as a joke for the infiltration.

Cindermoth

Possibly, I'd think the inquisitor's hope his light is great against illusions and lies

William Johnson

Man they should know better than to piss off the medics...

DrNutella

So do you guys think the inquisitor is watching Yun Ren because they suspect something or do they maybe want to recruit him? That would be fun.

GreenB

This was one of the most satisfying chapters I've read in a long time. The length and content were just *chefs kiss*. Keep up the good work!

Jaxer30

Key teaching the man seem to have missed: do NOT antagonize the healers

WyrdWizard

When the fulmination squad faltered, is written oddly.

Zach Cooper

Oh that could be it, i was just confused while reading it and it seemed the same as the descriptions we get of gou ren when in a scene

CUI13

Isn't Yun Ren undercover as Biren, a monkey-looking boy?

Zach Cooper

Im confused in the chapter it says “a boy who looks like a monkey” or “monkey boy.” Correct me if im wrong but Gou Ren is not with ri zu bi de and yun ren so who is being refered to here or is it an error that was supposed to say “a boy who looks like a fox” or “fox boy”?

Carl Smith

I personally like that Lishu was more concerned with Rizu taking the initiative than just obediently listening to her Seniors. He wants thinkers in his organization, not just dumb Drones.

Demian Buckle

Thank you for the Chapter.

Kat Wilton

I agree; Jipeng has almost turned into a comedic villain (in a good way). Have you ever seen the movie "Undercover Blues" starring Randy Quaid and Kathleen Turner? There's a character named Muerte - Jipeng reminds me of him ;-) Lovely, awesome chapter, CF - thank you! <3

Kat

My cabbages!

Nicholas Grey

He had tracked her progress and though she focused on the expected her records he noticed a particular pattern in her behavior. => “her records” doesn't fit there The charge of the f Fulmination Squadron faltered. => superfluous line break his own blade greatly superior to any one of the Fulmination Squadron’s blades it cut them in two. =>; needs a comma after 'blades', or needs to be re-phrased Lishu sat back to watch the–rather one-sided—beat down. => needs spaces around the insertion dashes “ the -rather one-sided- beat”

Pyro Hawk

It's going to be... interesting I suspect if Ri Zu's 'one big impact' she has by the time they move on from the Shrouded Mountain Sect is having trained up a 'Nurse Corps' to fill in for her absence from the Medical Pavilion. That said, I highly doubt each of the Fa Ram Disciples are going to have only *one* big impact.

Nicholas Grey

"oh, that was an injectable laxative. Novel." Love it. “Or are you perhaps here to try and take our very helpful little sister away from us?" Protective elder siblings, get!

Just A Dude

Yup. Just because there are assholes in a group doesn't mean the group are assholes.

STORRM

ahhh i liked this very much

Alexander Colton

There may be rot in this sect, but it turns out the doctors hate rot.

Cyrus McEnnis

True, true ; )

Barry Morgan

A minor element to the chapter, but still: I'm most pleased that Yushang was able to gets some payback for when she was ganged up on in her exam. A bit surprised that the thugs in question were friends of Jipeng, but I really shouldn't be.

Victor Segura

"the Disciples of the Shrouded Mountain Sect would fall upon anything posing a threat to the mortals with a vengeance." If this is true or mostly true, it would be amazing. I love how several characters and "villains" are shown to be this 3 dimensional individuals and institutions. The same way I love how Xianghua father was a protector of the weak and actually cared for his son while being an absolute shit father or the Ravine sect being this incredibly deep and enjoyable culture.

KRY

Well at least we know the medics are good

Baines

Jin's people just bust ass though we've seen in a number of different ways that they all have come to strive for personal excellence all of them are like "so and so is trying their best surely I can do just a little bit more"

Baines

don't forget Pi Pa

John Grizzly

goodness that end gave me a giggle. i think for somereason in this arc ive envisioned everything in the form or the last airbender animation and jipeng as a comic relief constantly being thrashed.

Nemo

Honestly, Lishu is being very relatable. I also grab my popcorn every time RiZu (or MeiMei for that natter) get annoyed

BlueMage_VT

Thank you for the very enjoyable chapter!

Cyrus McEnnis

Any industry. To be fair, it's also a huge credit to Lishu. Someone willing to allow a junior member of staff the ability to affect changes of this nature is a Good Boss.

WonderBread459

Tbf she was speaking to Lishu. It’s more impressive to tell your boss it was no trouble, even if it is exaggeration

Jojiro

When Jipeng appears in the eventual animated series, I wonder if he will get the dignity of a full-body render, or if he'll just be a barely hashed-out chibi character getting dunked on repeatedly. As someone in the hospitality industry btw, love Ri Zu's attention to logistics and to providing service. I'm curious though if she's dissembling a bit about the amount of work she's putting in not being much. I do want her to be able to experience her own competence in the way that she deserves to, instead of just...not understanding how impressive it is? Cuz golly, she's putting in hard work here. That type of logistics optimization is...vanishingly rare even in the upper echelons of this industry.

Cyrus McEnnis

I mean, is it wrong that I'm thinking "Mei has really taught her disciple well in the Dao of Management"?

Kyle Donmoyer

Silly man fucks around and finds out

Pierre laplant

Woo


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