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v4c24: The Fox Trap

🕑 Added 2023-07-05 04:22:06 +0000 UTC

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"and Yun Ren had kind of had wanted" seems like and extra had in here

Ichypa

Not sure if I’m a fan of the POV and chronology changing every 4-6 paragraphs, but I don’t know if I can offer a better way to go about it. It’s fun to see Ri Zu in her true form again, though.

Z H

Doubtful, but Yun should totally call him that the next chance he gets.

V01D

“Nezshit” is totally Uncle Nezhan, isn’t it…

AG

The reason book two split was because it was like 100 chapters but book three is around 60 so it probably won’t

Old Dog

As always, thank you for the chapter. So book 2 as written on RR was split into published books 2 and 3, Is book 3 from RR going to be split also?

Bonifacio Mario Peña Jr.

That would mean Bi De had the lowest score?

Carl Smith

So here is a thought. Yun Ren actually passed his test, But was told he failed because another more powerful group wanted him. Ri Zu failed, but the medical group defiantly wants her in their group. What if, and I'm just spit balling here, None of the four actually failed but "Failed."

swishmcfish

Uhm. The Shrouded Mountain's OG lightning based sect Founders didn't originate from the Shrouded Mountain. Also, there was only one human boy and one human girl, the other boy was a fox.

Pyro Hawk

... why I have this suspicion that one of the Fox-eared girls and the two human boys was the Fox Leader and the two Founders of the Shrouded Mountain Sect at the time of it's fall?

Nicholas Grey

The little vignette about “no boys allowed” is such a humanising bit of world building. Nice work.


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