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Chapter 330: Heroes of the Crimson Blade (Part 1)

🕑 Added 2025-06-15 14:00:06 +0000 UTC

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Seriously, why the hell didn't she make defenses!? The fact that all of her allies didn't encourage her to do so just goes to show how little they actually care about her. Seriously does everyone only think "me get stronger, stronger is only important thing"!?

Other

Ali: why didn't I build defenses!? Me: Because the author wants to torment you and make us all watch

Adrian Secchia

I'll be sorry to see you go, if you do choose to drop it.

Sardionysius

This story needs a rewrite from them defeating the troll city. Probably going to drop this story

Tabby the cat

Personally, I'm holding out hope that this is the event that will lead to real change in the town. The town watch has been on the decline, Jax has been losing support (both locally and from Team Lich), and once this is handled there will be ample evidence to tidy the town up and cripple their hold of the area. Then they can develop more political power as a city and work with more places to fight the lich. This slimy party is a bit unpleasant for multiple reasons, but they can be a solid tool to progress the story. I just don't know if they're secretly servants of the lich, or pawns via a servant placed in the upper ranks of the kingdom (or neither, but I can't imagine the lich not getting his necrotic claws in one of the most powerful dungeon killing parties, given his obsession with dungeons). I just hope the part with Ali dealing with this party will be clever and not drag on. There were a few parts of this chapter that were not really your usual writing style and broke immersion a bit, which made the chapter harder to read. Eg "Unholy crap! They needed to clear everyone out. Yesterday!". Just didn't sound like Ali or this book, at all. Also, this chapter is made worse for being released on it's own. When reading books, it's normal to have some parts that annoy readers or are unsatisfying as mc is faced with challenges. It will be better as part of a whole. I do appreciate the setup for Ali pissing off the ice witch by dispelling all her magic, and I liked the bit where the dungeon monsters were trying to intercept the magic to save the elves. I think it would have been better if it worked, though, rather than needing Clarence to save the day. Anyway, sorry for the long comment when I never give feedback as a chronic lurker. I just wanted to say something nice and hopefully slightly helpful because I'm enjoying this book a lot. Tftc. Looking forward to seeing how Ali gets though this.

SpaceFan839

Natural Shrines are not portable despite whatever value they may be, and this very strong and equally greedy party knows this. Also the shrine is worthless if Ali is still alive, so there is that.

Muir

I don't want to seem negative, but 'vastly overpowered outside force rolls the party effortlessly' is a thing that loses its impact with repetition.

Stephanie Washburn

Yeah, you'd think Ali would be using her teleportation circles and recall to better effect here. At least to bring back her friends. Her mind is fast enough to react to the Blind Lich (at least a little). I get that she's in shock and scrambling, but there's no way she doesn't have the reaction speed to have her kobolds talk to the raiding party even if the warning is only: "I can't keep healing you right now."

Stephanie Washburn

Did they not even notice the shrine? And the giant chunk of magicite in it? As greedy as these @#$&s are, I think it would be worth a comment, at least?

Alexix

My god this party is absolute scum. Still not sure how Ali is gonna beat them, but I hope she figures something out. Looking forward to reading the next part

Choronach

Timewalk, my beautiful author! I really hope you have something special because Ali being caught her pants down while friends away was used ages ago. They're all supposed to be smart, they all know who's plotting against them, the exact same plot is being used against her (higher level team to stomp her). With the Blind Lich acting, they should have cleaned the house because they know Ali, Calen's mother, Vivian, heck, even Malika are a thorn in the side of these 2 bits vilains. Ali number 1 priority should be her own protection because without her, Myrin Keeps dead, Jax will never give up until one side is dead and they all know this. Maybe the larger world can deal with the Blind Lich. Maybe they can't. But this all plot is unfortunately not really realistic. Fool me once, shame on you. Fool me twice, shame one me. What's the count? 4? 5? And I really think you'll have either make interludes to show how the rest of the world is preparing themselves for the fight against the Lich or include it directly. One town can do nothing against multiple millenias necromancer. I like everything in this story but these 2 points are two much and it's ruining my fun a little 😭

Tone Engel

I'm betting on a political resolution, though there's been no development of the "nobility" and the larger world (elves, trolls, destruction of everything). Presumably there are lines this kill squad can't cross. Lira? Elder Elves? Elder Trolls? Hit pause on the raids, teleport back all the elders, and a "what-do-you-think-you're-doing-here" confrontation.

Scyfe

Yea, one of my gripes is how no one really follows through on intelligence they have. They knew mieral was mind controlling them at the start but they just ignored it forever. They know jax/kieren are murdering people but they ignore it. Nevyn knows ali has the magic he wants and where she is located due to Nathaniel but I'm assuming he won't act on it... Just hopefully this arc wraps up the evil town watch arc as it's falling a bit flat. Having the adventure group walk in and be over the top comic book evil isn't helping.

John

Im really hoping the team bring down the law on the town watch and the kingdom after this attempted murder. Also echoing other people that id rather have waited until this could be a multipart release, basically nothing happens in the chapter except ali being rushed down, but the franticness is both unpleasant and will have been forgotten/muted by the time the next chapter comes out

SpaceFan839

Ryn did tell her, there has just not been enough time to do anything.

Kensyi

After reading the comments, I think I am going to hold off on reading this chapter until later... I am kinda scared for all of Ali's friends, and all the good people of Merien' Keep.

Tanj

Why did Ryn not tell her they are here to kill her? Why is she not bringing everyone home to help? Well, I guess we will see what the author's plan was, but this better be good.

Gamingninja

Agreed, its just so unsatisfying, atleast if you have the resolution to it it doesnt feels as bad

InLucidReverie

Yeah, this needed to be a part of a double release or something as it's just... Zero enjoyment to be had

InLucidReverie

This is... not enjoyable to read. It's too quick and tje characters are just so comically evil. I was really expecting the dungeon group to be more interested in the dungeon.

Lijwent

I should never have read this today...

shootingQuasar1

Wonder what the three mark tree's level is and what it's gonna do when the adventurers make it there. They even left their back open to Clarence that can't be a good idea...

Rip Woodham

Tbh I'm not sure what is dumber. Ali, the assassins, or everyone else for leaving Ali by herself. Challenge the status quo of the world, have wealth beyond imagining, live in a city with a higher level assassin that wants you dead... and are there even any other shrines that can do what she can after Aman Rak? Seems pretty important with the Lich well on the way to world domination! But nah, let's just not think about any of that.

KramZe

Sadly I must agree with you this chapter really had no enjoyment. I could accept if they were like bandits. But this is just pure Avarice, Lust. They should have been named "The Seven deadly sins.". Sadly I fear there will be more of these 'slimy' chapters.

HornboozeWFG

.... if this is how your acting with ali and the residents of marine keep.... then it's only a wonder how you all across within other dungeons....As this is all so murderhobo behavior, and I shall savor it when you all die as there is straight up no reason for this and then Jax and mori asses are next on the chopping block

CherMi

I still don't see how Ali can reliably beat them. But I can tell that reading this chapter brought me no enjoyment, even though nothing bad has happened. I should probably pause for a week and binge the whole arc, maybe it won't be as slimy with a resolution.

The one Sith to rule them all

Hope she honestly wipes out new Daria too All we’ve seen of them if Pression, exploitation, hate and discrimination Not to mention what with there repeated attacks upon our mc as a person, and now the elves, they culd be heald for treason against the world and cooperation with the lich Thus the conclusion: meteor swarm the capital

The one Sith to rule them all

Well, the crimson blades are officially dead now, jsut can’t stay there hands from innocents

Azgaroth

Until they exit corrupted by the Demon Lord inside....

zimmergage

Isn't the rift the answer


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