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Chapter 123: A Meeting at the Shrine

🕑 Added 2024-07-21 14:00:06 +0000 UTC

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Adrian Secchia

Fair feedback, thank you.

FuriousDee

This chapter really makes me think that the torture chapter shouldn’t have happened and would have been better as just an argument over whether to kill her which leaves us in suspense. Maybe they also interrogate her friends and justify it by calling her an existential threat. As it is that chapter is shocking but it totally ruined my immersion and I only got it back by waiting a while to start reading again. It also changes the tone of the story just by happening in it. After reading that chapter the decision to reveal the shrine seems to be monumentally stupid and like something Malika would have stopped her doing but it is the same leap of faith they need to take now. Sorry for the long post. Basically the contrast between this chapter and the torture chapter makes me feel like the tone and style of the story feel weird and inconsistent which has been the biggest threat to my immersion in the story and I think it would be more effective toned down. Particularly when you don’t have to wait so long between chapters and the tonal whiplash feels way stronger.

HornboozeWFG

Aunty Lira's class in being a badassin all ways except of love life is now in session

BerciTheBeast

Also due to Ali they pretty much hold the region's monopoly on that arcane water thing, which is a pretty strong point too. They're especially gonna need it for the upcoming blight fight. Having an allied dungeon is a pretty big economic power-move. Honestly economy-, logistics- and survival-wise her negotiolation position is pretty strong, so if she ends up with being enslaved to someone or getting a shit deal I'm going to be pretty upset. Better no-deal than a shitty deal. They can pull out the people they care about form the city & win by themselves with Ali's army.

BerciTheBeast

They can totally get more votes by becoming a food and magicite supplier for the city. Also war supplies for the bastion thing?

BerciTheBeast

They should totally do that regardless...

Dero_Dore

"People are worried and ho*a*rding essentials.”. Dropped the A there, hording is a VERY different thing (:

Forrest Venable

Also keeping this all a secret would be really simple with the mind mage: just wipe everyone's memory so that the adventurers can legitimately say that they don't know about Ali This is one of the examples of mind magic being used with consent, as none of the people involved would want to reveal Ali but remembering that she is still alive would be an obstacle to that goal

Forrest Venable

It seems like it would be a vastly better solution to create a hidden passageway to the adventurers' guild and then level up its members in secret, while producing food and such for the community Meanwhile sensitive allies, like Lydia, could flee the town and take up residence in the dungeon. This would be relatively short term but probably worth doing anyway because that would help Ali and co protect against the incoming blight The end result is that you present the council with a fait accompli: the dungeon exists, has many powerful allies, and is the source of their food supply Attempting to investigate would take valuable resources away from attempts to handle the blight and thus is relatively unlikely to have much dedicated to it. Even if they do investigate and find the domain, it would be easy to pin the blame on Aunt Lira, whom the kingdom already has a relationship with

Azgaroth

Thank for the chapter. Well to "convince" the tie-breaker, they just need to reveal the new, under truth spell/skill, that Talia of the Town Watch killed his son....


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