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Chapter 192: Predator and Prey

🕑 Added 2024-12-15 15:00:04 +0000 UTC

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Tanj

A raid level boss that spent 3,000 years stopping incursions from hell might be worth some respect and even support. Even if he has become hostile to everyone. There are times when the RPG roots of this conflict with real-life empathy.

Adrian Secchia

Yeah, I did want it to be affecting them the moment they step into the realm, but I also wanted it to be a gradual reveal - and that's difficult to pull off smoothly. The first clue comes in the fourth paragraph after Ali passes through the rift.

Rip Woodham

I think they were being affected even when they made the decision to enter the portal, but it might be better to make it clearer... because this is pretty high on the magnitude of stupid and should have gotten them killed. They've been pretty reckless lately, doing the kind of stuff imo you wouldn't if it wasn't a game or you didn't need to keep the story exciting, but this is the icing on the cake and readers might get very frustrated over it. Anyway, you made these demons pretty scary, nice. :D

WolfKing69

Well this escalated quickly!!!

The one Sith to rule them all

Well… that’s what u get for running into an abyssal plane… what if they managed to close the portal while inside anyways???

Drakenclaw

Honestly, that was so incredible stupid. Intelligence really does not seem to correlate with being smart. Or wisdom with common sense. I already thought last chapter about the problem with killing the boss as he was apparently stopping the demons from just flooding in. But then walking into the rift? Without doing any research? With no real goal? Even if they had found a way to shut down the rift from the other side that would have just left them stuck in hell. If this wasn't a story but an RPG, that would have been a good cause for a total party wipe.

Danel4d

Oh, and Mark of Prey being Domain Magic sounds like bad news for the rest of the guild!

Ulsar

tyfc

Cameron Orr

I always love a good run for your lives chapter!! It's a shame that Ali's already used her pause time ability, that would be pretty handy about now

Adrian Secchia

rofl :)

Fredrik Rikheim

It just a portal to hell, what could go wrong?

HornboozeWFG

Damn, they were absolutely screwed, and now that they fucked around and found out in another plane they will be more careful and prepared as thos almost ended there entire go at life... Ali really needs an better identification skill... something seeing how there aren't many things relatively older than her in the world except her and the undead and read up on a section of mental protection from Clarence

Azgaroth

Thank for the chapter. Well, not a Dungeon Ali want to share Domain with.... Question for Timewalk; does that Abyssal Plane has a limit, like it is only the Dungeon, and no "Cavern" goes "outside"; like the Rift is the only Exit/Entry point??? Because if that the case, when Ali become friend with the Fire Dungeon, and she can share Domain; and perhaps "create" plant to spread her Domain inside the Fire dungeon, she could invade/conquer the Plane/Dungeon, and make it some sort of Hidden/Secret Zone..... To test thing (like Monster, materials, Traps....) or just to have a backup for recreating the Dungeon in case of Destruction.... (And quick question if Ali conquer all the Plane and install her Domain here; does the Mana escape from the Rift??? Because if it doesn't, i can't wait for the effect of a Full Rift/Plane/Dimension of Nature and Arcane mana, and the different reaction to Mana Concentration/Density.....)

Danel4d

Corrupted blood, yikes - I remember the stories of that 😂 This is definitely a nasty mess they’ve stumbled into, but I’m not sure what else they could’ve done under the circumstances.


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