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Dao of the Deal 59. Spirit Stones (3)

🕑 Added 2022-09-16 05:09:31 +0000 UTC

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jacobk

Thanks for reading! If it's any consolation, the first volume (roughly chapter 1-51) is meant to be the MC finding his feet in the new world. The second volume is going to be more about inter-sect relationships and more xianxia magic.

ParoxysmDK

Tyftc, i've been thinking about this for a while, but i personally think that the story needs WAY more POV shift. The more i read, the more it feels like every side character is made of cardboard, only the MC has any sort of fleshed out personality. We know almost nothing about anyone else, and the little we DO know, is superficial at most, and redundant at worst. The same kind of goes for the world. There has been very little actual world building, and because of the MC's chosen path he doesn't come into contact with stuff that would normally help in this regard; like is usually the case in Xian XIa. Some examples could be: Spirit beasts (and their cultivation path), dao/karma, demonic cultivators, inner sect and intersect politics, royalty, different cultivator tools (and how they're crafted): Like pill furnaces, pills, elixirs, different spiritual materials (like cores, wildlife and plantlife). Stuff like this all helps with shaping the world and both shows, and explains how stuff exists, how it's used, how difficult it is to procure/make, fleshes out how big and different the world is, gives a sense of fantasy (different humanoid races, fantastical plants, magical geography that breaks normal convention etc.). This story lacks almost all of it.

Emerson Fortier

time to armor yourself in gold. No one kills a goose that lays golden eggs, after all.


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