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A Pack Of His Own - Ch. 13 (alpha)

🕑 Added 2024-04-17 22:43:54 +0000 UTC

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Ian B

I really love this story. I also like that it ties all of the Silversmith stories together. Strongly enjoyed

Jeffrey Sutyla

The paragraph describing the Prodigal -- I think you meant "made of dark wood", not "made a dark wood".

Todd Garrison

A very intriguing chapter with a lot of political context. I like where this is going.

Gregg Hagerty

When the dragons enter "know" I think maybe better than "known." It seems an awkward sentence that I had to read several times.

Gregg Hagerty

When the elves enter Will expects them "to" be singing rather than "of" be singing.

Gregg Hagerty

When Tommy is talking to Theresa and asks if there is anything the Fangs want to discuss. You use the word "send" that doesn't seem to fit. Maybe "sense" but you use that in the following phrase, so maybe not...


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