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🕑 Added 2022-04-24 07:59:18 +0000 UTC

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Mr. Bigglesworth

Fixt tyvm!

Sean Wilner

"...scenery completely of free tunnels..." -> "scenery completely free of tunnels..."

Mr. Bigglesworth

I was also trying the new voice-to-text software on the laptop. It appears I'll need to do things on the laptop with Dragon, and final check on the other computer. Oh well, live and learn. It did speed up the process, but clearly, there are drawbacks.

Andrew Meyers

Yup, much better than it was. Of course, there'll always be ways to improve it further, but as the saying goes, 'perfect is the enemy of good enough.'

Mr. Bigglesworth

*nod* I blame working on the laptop screen that is half as large as the old one. Thank you for catching these! I did second and third edits to catch stuff that didn't show the first time. Hopefully, it is much smoother now. It was very weird how Grammarly didn't seem to see any of these until the second or third pass.

Andrew Meyers

The edited version is better, but the first half of this chapter still has a few very easy points that should have been caught: This sentence looks makes little sense unless you replace the 'now and' with 'now that': > Goblins and the problems that you’re going to encounter now and we’ve exited the dungeon’s first floor will need careful work. > Goblins and the problems that you’re going to encounter now that we’ve exited the dungeon’s first floor will need careful work. Missing a 'do' and 'by': > What you mean the real adventure? > What do you mean by the real adventure? Malformed 'that we're' that came out as a 'there were': > The area there were in now after exiting the tunnel is basically a new floor, right? > The area that we're in now after exiting the tunnel is basically a new floor, right? Dislocated comma: > reached civilization the goblins, we encounter > reached civilization, the goblins we encounter > For all, she knew Meyun > For all she knew, Meyun Missing apostrophe and comma: > At this point were going to need to use actual skills. > At this point, we're going to need to use actual skills. Double quote instead of apostrophe: > I”ll > I'll

Mr. Bigglesworth

Edits have occurred in a more awakened state of mind. I will be testing my new laptop to try and find why it is helpfully altering posts as they are copied in by giving them both bolded sections and complete style changes in some parts. Apology for the weirdness!

Mr. Bigglesworth

This is the edited part if all the Grammarly corrections are helpfully removed and random text is bolded.

Mr. Bigglesworth

Not the wrong version, just my copypasta being assisted by a helpful new system. Very. Helpful.

Mr. Bigglesworth

New laptop, new bugs. :(

Gregory Hunsicker

Here's my guess. This chapter is the unedited version that was supposed to be sent to the new editor. He probably accidentally uploaded the wrong version. At least I hope so. Because if this is what the editor sent back.. lol I'm loving Eve being an 'elder' and 'teaching' the new beings to the system. She can get some major benefits out of people accessing the system for the first time. Especially if she can put them in her favor early on.

mpop

Did you accidentaly upload the wrong version? Lots of grammatical errors and an entire section thats bold text.

Mercury313

What's going on with the part that is written fat?


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