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Scorching Ascension - 1.61: Reshuffle (Unedited)

🕑 Added 2025-01-09 20:18:56 +0000 UTC

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Elinar Godly

Enjoyed the chapter and the new set-up will be fun to see. A few suggestions you might find useful. First the trait. Scorching Ascendency: Once a day, when fighting creatures above your level, all your stats are improved by 10% But then Ethan’s thoughts make it sound like it is a permanent improvement versus higher-level opponents. I think it needs a touch-up so that it's clearer. I would suggest adding “once a day” somewhere in his considerations. I would also make the trait description a bit more clear and straightforward: “Once a day boost all your stats by 10% against creatures above your level.” Also, if Ethan activates this in the morning as he enters a fight, and let's say he only fights creatures above his level for the whole day, when will the bonus expire? In a few minutes, after the creatures around him are killed, or maybe when he stops fighting due to lack stamina or mana? Minor tense mistake I think: A couple of hours later… Both have(HAD) been dealt with pretty fast and now Ethan …

calcroissant

Aight fixing them, now it should be good

calcroissant

They’re a bit messed up, will check in the morning. The claws and modifiers should be in their own grouping, and the wings should be alone. Thanks Touch!

Touch

Propose Edit [Mana Heart], [Sapping Scales]   [ [Scorching][Extended][Draconic Claws], [Draconic Wings] ] Also, the second ones have bracket covering them

Touch

Edit (is it because they’re modifier?) Spell Forms: [[Scorching][Extended][Draconic Claws], [Draconic Wings]] Author either forgot , or it doesn’t need one between claws and wings

Touch

Edit attention at the creature ahead as he stepped forward You forgot “.” At the end


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