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Scorching Ascension - 2.22: Indecision

🕑 Added 2025-06-20 15:25:01 +0000 UTC

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calcroissant

I got confused for a sec before I realized it's for book1 heh. I'll write these down for when the copy is sent back to me. Will fix'em if the editor doesn't catch em

guillaume nguyen

24 : "Ethan moved. Lunging forward, he crossed the ten feet or so separating them in half a second and punched. The archer, cursing, had been raising his bow when Henry’s fist sunk into his stomach and made his feet lift off the ground." "Henry grinned and ignited his right hand. Instantly, a wave of heat spread around him, making the grass at his feet dry up and wither. The man’s eyes went wide with alarm, and an earthy-brown pane of light appeared along the surface of the kite shield." > Henry strikes again ^^ 25 : Ethan lowered his left hand from his lips and summoned [Claws] around it once more. He gave the archer a confused look. “Did I not make myself clear? This fight’s happening. And you pointing that thing at me after I warned you not, you is the least of why it has to happen.” > The last sentence is unclear. 'And after pointing that thing at me afetr I warned you not to, it is the least of' ?

calcroissant

Will fix the typos in a couple of days! Gonna have some downtime soon. TY Guillaume :D

guillaume nguyen

Yup, asking if she's alright and if she's under pressure, only for her to hesitate to speak is such a massive red flag. Typical abused person material. Shut up and stay down, f**ker, your betters are talking. Don't you DARE try to give her an order right before us. You can't afford the consequences. Seriously ?!! They made her work as soon as she got out of her Tutorial, without giving her time to destress a bit or any reassurances about her family ?!! That's clearly barely disguised slavery, and we do NOT condone that. 2 interactions with the Union so far, one mixed, one bad : Personnaly, I'm putting in the case 'Organisation definitely dimantled in the near future, possible extermination of leadership'. Mental healing is such a cheat. The rest of us must deal with our trauma the good ol' way, by failing at it and be scarred for life. Yup, negociations have broken down, but I'm not pitying these fools. The way they acted around Isabelle, they're clearly fine with the way they pushed her around, no remorses or hesitations. They're as guilty as the leadership who order them. Just to check if it's an individual city stance or the whole Union. *Meanwhile, Brotherhood idiot* "Why do I suddenly hear boss music ?" /////////////////// Typos : "Ethan straightened back up, looked away from the groaning man as he tried to get up, then looked at the winged woman and ignored the sword she was pointing at him, which was now burning with an intense red flame. " > then focused on the winged woman while ignoring the (2 'looked away' in the same sentence) "The woman looked back in time to see her companion coughing out retching out blood." > choose one. I prefer retching. "The words got stuck in her throat, and the woman swallowed, sweat beading down her brow from the heat of her sword while the giant golem stood there, unsure of how to proceed." > while the giant golem squirmed around (I think squirming fits better the image of an anguished teenager)

Chad Williams

Fantastic chapter!

James Faulkner

Man that’s satisfying, Tftc!


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