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Torchbearer - Chapter 5 (beta - early access)

🕑 Added 2025-07-30 22:58:11 +0000 UTC

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calcroissant

Thank you for the detailed feedback! It helps a lot :)

Melanie Henrie

Not confusing, but probably best not to switch povs more than two times in a chapter where it’s possible. I like that we get to see through lott and thalias eyes, but we could have gotten this one from thalia and maybe the beginning of the next from lott? I agree with Touch about being a bit disassociated from the MC, but i feel like i know him better now that he’s shown us how genuinely happy he is just putting seeds in the ground. Im excited to see where you take him, and i think we are at a pretty acceptable level of connection for chapter 5

calcroissant

Good feedback. I'll look into plugging a few small tidbits earlier, and I planned on sticking with him a bit more next chapter. Thanks!

Touch

Love the concept so far, but there’s this feeling of dissociation from MC because we don’t know him THAT well and don’t know his personality/power This feeling of course present in other novel, but with THIS novel concept being that MC already “started” his life/story, it’s more present because **we NEED to know a lot more about him to relate to the story**


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