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Fabricator v2 - Chapter 10

🕑 Added 2023-07-02 00:44:16 +0000 UTC

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greatGUARDIAN100

Loved the twist and cant wait for what he does to make a cool new arm, what artificing master doesn't have an artificial limb or body part? Also sorry about not being able to make all those correction comments into 1 but patreon doesn't work the best with my tablets Google chrome.

greatGUARDIAN100

"His blood ran from her lips* and coated her fangs as she smiled at him, “Oh, is dinner up to something?”"

BookDragonling

I definitely wouldn't forgive Azazel. The MC was doing fine until he came along.

King hand axe

I really wasn't expecting that twist, im very surprised that it happened so quickly, and how he ended up in a stray devils lair wasn't very well defined I guess, maybe needed a few line of something like, XYZ but as he was distracted, he missed the pleasant voice whispering in the background, or that his feet were going the other way from his Vesba. Something that let the reader know he's being misdirected rather than than somewhat jarring change as he "wakes" up in a dark house. Enjoyed the use of magic to protect himself, I might have given it more time before he lost an arm but still works well with what you have planned. Will the mech arm stay permanently of will it be a temporary thing till he gets good enough to regenerate his arm and change the tech into a sleeve kinda deal.


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