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A picture with the Gramper sisters and about some questions in Private Messages

🕑 Added 2022-12-21 06:21:44 +0000 UTC
A picture with the Gramper sisters and about some questions in Private Messages

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Steven W.

There are so many things I could give positive feedback for and I've also enjoyed that you took my criticism about the timing of Cornelia's abduction - she disappears in the dungeon very early in the game and her friends don't ever wonder where she is - and used it as an argument for Cedric to break Cornelia: "Your friends and family didn't even look for you." Very good, such a strong line. And I hope to see more of Hay Lin soon. The characters were broken in a believable way, except maybe for Will: I am not convinced about her. How Will says in the last scene that she doesn't care about anybody and she just wants to have sex. It was said in an earlier update that the potion would not turn her into a mindless zombie and that she would keep her rationality ... but I don't see her rationality anymore. I don't like the reasoning "it makes me feel good ... the rest doesn't matter". Weak logic. Will has deep compassion for other people and it goes too much against her character to completely throw that away. This could have been done better - for example, after the shock that Rick is Cedric, Will could have decided that she can't do anything at the moment (it's already too late), but maybe through becoming his "queen" she could do something in the future, so the motivation for the sex would have been a combination of both sexual desire and strategy. Will already had her lowest point in the story - when she was on the toilet with Cedric and refused to help her friends. How low she had fallen then! Now she needs to climb up again and win some power back, otherwise there is no development any more.

Steven W.

What a fantastic update 0.17 is! My sincere congratulations to you and your writer both! You are creating the definitive "dark path" WITCH story here, which will stand for all time. Cedric hast just enough humanity in him so that the player doesn't hate him (nobody could relate to a pure psychopath).


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