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Syl: Chapter 161

🕑 Added 2024-08-21 12:00:09 +0000 UTC

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JAndy

Maybe, maybe not. For one, this is direct speech by a character. People don't always speak as clearly as possible with perfect flow. Even if it were narration, it isn't bad. If I were an editor specifically hired by the author to also make stylistic suggestions, I could see maybe proposing a few alternatives for communicating this information, but I'm not going to cross those lines, nor am I going to make preference-based suggestions unasked and annoy both author and other commenters.

Amarianna

Third one would probably flow better in the middle of an explanation, especially when explaining unknown affects of a type of item. From a writing standpoint, it gives more clarity by focusing on the soul bound item's ability to "not be used by anyone, except the one it is bound to". Thus focusing on an exclusion of the second part, towards the effect of first part of the ability.

Amarianna

Maybe the spell only works on one paw at a time unless it's double cast to create "Frostclaws" although, the spell does seem to work on both at the same time. So if it does, changing the spell name to a plural form would make more sense.

Amarianna

Now she can make claws of any element and have it count as a new spell! Just think about fire claws or acid claws enhancing Pelopi's damage makes me excited! Not to mention Syl will be able to use it better if she shifted to an animal form. Also, I'm 98% sure that the blue edge of the axe is effective on ghost type enemies, based on the fact that the other edge looked to deal extra damage physically and Syl saw each edge as opposite effects.

Broseph

Half expected mother to troll Syl and change it to create: arm popsicles or something.

Daniel Mountain

MWAHAHAHAHA! TAKE THAT, BORING CLERICAL MAGE!

matt

It really should be [Frostclaws].

Zackery Schrenk

MOoore!!!

jonathan

I wonder how boring one could make the names. Has anyone ever named the spells "Spell number one", "Spell used every time I need to take a dump", or "aa1" and such and such?

87894354

Thanks for the chapter. Regarding the [Ghostflesh Choppa] - that's excellent game design on the part of the dungeon master (maybe; we don't know how much control the dungeon has over what gifts get given). Give that entity a medal. It could see that an adventurer was otherwise going to be feeling mostly useless, so it made the reward a means to contribute. On the other hand... Jet's weapons got damaged. If you're a DM that really, *really* wants to hurt your players, target their prized weapons. Sweet to see our Syl trying to teach. They grow up so fast! Typo: "I heard a swordsman who was soul-bound to his sword, and only he could unsheathe it. It also apparently couldn't cut him." "heard a swordsman" -> "heard of a swordsman", or "heard about a swordsman".

JAndy

"It just means nobody, but you can use it." -> "It just means nobody but you can use it." OR "It just means nobody, except you, can use it."

Engineer4God

Tank oo fur da chap!

Belmont Igneul

The series art is now canon

CataFlan

TFTC! An Axe to kill ethereal beings and now claws to affect them. Excited to read the next chapter! 3rd floor here we go!

dtape467

Syl finally got her revenge

Bi-Dailey

TFTC

Shai182

TFTC! And yes, that is Basic Equipment for Adventures...


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