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Jay and Carly Book 2, Chapter 13

🕑 Added 2021-02-10 20:43:50 +0000 UTC

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thanks for the kind, well though out words. A lot of your musings mirror my own when I was working through this story (particularly when it came to the second book which I didn't want to be "more of the same"... It would have been easy for it to be an endless parade of women but that just didn't seem right). I'm glad it avoided the pitfalls that you mentioned and didn't take you out of the story.

Reso

As I've been going about my day-to-day life for the last few days, I've been reflecting on one aspect of this chapter that I really appreciated. Specifically, I thought it made perfect sense that Jay and Carly didn't have a suitable criminal defense lawyer on tap, just ready to go. Instead (just like one might expect for someone in their financial position), they absolutely had tax and financial representation, and those professionals were able to recommend suitable counsel. I thought that detail made a lot of sense, and certainly rang true to life. As a side note, I also appreciated Jay's recognition of the fact that his money and the resulting power made the arrest considerably less of an inconvenience and threat that it might have otherwise been. Something else that I've been mulling over for a while now: In these sorts of stories, it is often beneficial for the characters to be independently wealthy so they can afford to have these extravagant fantasy lifestyles. In fact, it's almost REQUIRED that the characters in stories this extravagant have some sort of wealth, just so the story is possible. With that said, I really hate it when stories just throw in a brief statement that various characters are independently wealthy and as such they just get to do whatever the hell they want and have enormous wealth and power. That kind of bullshit makes me roll my eyes and really turns me off of an author's work. I think I would much rather not HAVE an explanation for how characters can afford to do thing A or thing B then to have a terrible explanation like that. I think that the way you've gradually introduced Jay and Carly's wealth and power into the story helped preserve my suspension of disbelief. Discussion of their financial means made it into the story as it made sense to do so, in bits and pieces. A statement on ethics: I appreciated the occasional acknowledgment of the privilege afforded to the story participants because of their wealth and power. I also approved of the various limits that those with power imposed upon themselves, for the betterment of those less fortunate around them. Specifically, I very much appreciate that Jay is requiring that the women in his life who are going to college must complete that schooling (and presumably, earn good grades while they're at it). Additionally, despite her preferred status as absolute bottom feeder, Jay refused to take control of Carly's wealth. All of these actions serve to preserve the real life interests of the people around Jay, with a mind towards leaving them the option to stop being under his power whenever they wish to do so.

Reso

Interestingly, I did some googling and it appears that in the past utah maintained statutes allowing common law marriage partially to enable polygamy prosecution of individuals who merely said they were married without actually filing the relevant papers (statutory marriage). Apparently one key component of a common law marriage is the couple having proclaimed themselves to be husband and wife, and being known to their community as being married. In other words, some variants of common law marriage statutes might have considered Kyrsten and Jay to be married. Fortunately, it doesn't appear that merely cohabitating without adopting the terms and trappings of marriage will usually invoke common law marriage, in the few states that still recognize such. I had briefly pictured a hellish world where merely living with multiple partners would be illegal because the state could always argue that the participants were common law married, without any of those persons having deliberately sought statutory marriage status.

I'm really glad that was your reaction. I know these last couple chapters have been sex light but there were just so many story elements I was trying to bring in that I couldn't find any way around that. The next couple chapters will be a little more smut filled (I know you weren't complaining btw...) The legal stuff: Yes, I did some research and some poking around. The cases are completely fictitious but hopefully sound sufficiently real that it doesn't break anyone's immersion. One of my big pet peeves is reading stories about poker where the writer clearly doesn't understand how poker works. The biggest one being when someone bets more than the other person has to cover and somehow the writer thinks that means the better "wins the pot" unless the other person comes up with the difference. It just completely ruins those stories for me. So I try to make sure I'm sufficiently educated on something before I write about it so I don't ruin the experience for others ;)

You know, for a story series I started reading because of the sex, this started off with absolutely none ... and I was still eager to dig into it. You've created a great "universe" for this whole fantasy to play out inside. And did you do your research here? Because the legal stuff was very convincing! I'm very interested to see where this goes.

I think you're getting too good at reading the tea leaves ;)

BlissfulDarkness

Honestly, I think Hideo likes the lifestyle they have now. Sherry seems to genuinely care for him outside of a sexual role, and Hideo fully knew what he was getting with Sherry and actively stays with her. Arguably, there is likely a subconscious element from Hideo's part as to why Aimee is there too, based on Aimee's choice of words and correcting herself before she said too much.

MacDaddyD

Yes, more Jay and Carly! Been itching for a new chapter for a few weeks now. It’ll be interesting to find out the ADA’s motivation for going after Jay. Is it jealousy, ambition, or maybe she just doesn’t like men? I’malso curious if Hideo stays permanently whipped or if Jay helps him become more dominant with Sherry. In any case, it sounds like you’ve written your self into a place where there are a lot of different story threads you can follow.


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