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Chapter 115: Throwing the fight

🕑 Added 2019-03-21 00:06:45 +0000 UTC

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Macronomicon

Hmm, alright. I’ll see how I can reword that to focus on the fact that he wants to free them and the fact that everyone is so distantly related it’s almost pointless to care.

Sean Austin Gartland

That rapey crazy gay person stereotype is too prevalent in culture. If he had done that to a girl it would probably be more outrageous but it's still okay. Otherwise I think how he views his descendants as only counting if they're purple racist. It's fine if you want Garth to be racist and rapey but otherwise I would suggest him judging his descendants based on their character. I was very tempted to add a "rather than their skin" just cause.

Karolus

Its surprisingly hard to bite someone's neck, you usually end up biting the shoulder or the face (cheek or ear). Otherwise, I think the fight is fine.

LifeOfConfusion

Garth should make a trip to adamantium dungeon, make a baseball bat out of the stuff

Don

I think you did a good job on the fight scene, it could even get a little more violent and weird without it being too much. After all, it has to be believable that someone accustomed to violence was scared by it.

C. Wilbs

epic choice for the song...totally lent to the whole "crazy" vibe.

Macronomicon

Let me know if it's too weird and violent.

EitherWay

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