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Chapter 116: Secret's Out.

🕑 Added 2019-03-22 02:41:41 +0000 UTC

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Thundermike00

U know you screwed up when you see the guy you stabbed visually heal himself back in seconds.

Mr. Bigglesworth

The story has turned to strange shit from the coherent piece it was before. G'luck reading it now.

Seadrake

I think that's primarily due to him being a teenager and the trauma, as well as him lacking the stats or people that would balance or 'hinge' him. I also hope he moves past his grief.

Hey, I love the world you've built and I like the story line. But Garth himself had gotten pretty off-putting pretty quickly - it seems like his reincarnation has also lead to a pretty significant regression of his character building. Maybe this is on purpose and you'll have him back to being a character that is something other than a thin, only hateable ass...but there's no sign of that at all. In the first arc, he had his issues, but he was working towards getting past them while also progressing a plotline. Since the restart (which generally I really like - this is an interesting story development) it feels kinda lazy in development. "Oh, he's crazy now and totally unhinged for no reason!" Who cares? We've been through his totally anti-social behavior before. Plus it's felt unwarranted. First couple chapters he was kinda doing ok - I mean thrust into crazy town with only vague rationales, but that's ok. And then he meets characters that we might end up feeling something toward (good? Bad? I dunno!) and he just kinda loses it? It's frustrating. I like your story, and think it has potential. But I'm worried it's at a loose end.

Don

I'd say you did just as well without the caffeine. Thanks for the chapter, I enjoy your work!

EitherWay

Noice

Macronomicon

Not 100% sure i did any good today. Maybe I'm no good without caffeine.


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