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MT 319 - Ayamari Part 3

🕑 Added 2025-10-28 21:27:13 +0000 UTC

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Sir Raiu Koren

I was hoping to convey unconventional physics that are perceptible to superhumans, using things like the scale, a dagger that doesn't materially exist, and it targeting her mana matrix. I meant to bypass fields altogether by removing the object from the material universe. I'm reconsidering how to express it for the final edit. I was thinking about expanding local light cones and other ways to maintain one-way causality considering her speed, but I suppose at the end of the day, we aren't necessarily trying to write hard sci-fi.

yohan gu

An attometer is very small. If atoms and quantum mechanics are a thing in this world, I’d suggest changing attometer to nanometer, because that’s functionally the same to a casual reader, but someone with more knowledge on quantum physics will wonder what it even means to be separated by something that is on the order of 100 million times smaller than the typical width of atomic wavefunctions and several hundred times smaller than the charge radius of a proton.

Maxx

Is that why arlo was so confused by her soul? Cause it's not her, and it potentially not even having a soul. Ah I see, the next chapter explains it

Cornman

This last Ayamari section ended up way longer than a normal chapter. Breaking it into two made it two slightly smaller chapters than I normally publish. Both are coming out on Patreon today.


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