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Chapter 06 of Broken Dreams is out for Squires
🕑 Added 2025-08-04 19:22:05 +0000 UTCWhew, that was one long chapter. Nothing quite big happened, but somehow, this was the chapter I struggled with the most for years. Anyway, I'm rather happy with it, but do let me know what you think.
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Comments
Pedro Eugenio de Lima
Great ending! The chat about jon future gave me hope about the direction of this story.
Joshua
Extremely sus about those beads, 13 beads for the betrayed lord commander? Wonder if that was an accident or not, if it wasn't that's a pretty sweet little reference
Perraup
This was very well written. Great chapter.
Yeno .M Evig
Bloodraven is just a taller Yoda lol. Tyftc
John Pinson
Hmmm.. realized the incorrect grammar in my post. Not transition between character POVs, but the characters being interacted with had more agency, giving them more depth and influence on the course of thought and events. My bad.
John Pinson
I noticed in this chapter there was a much smoother transition between character POVs, allowing for a more complete 1st person perspective, acknowledging secondary characters perspective influence on the story more than usual. This might have been the struggle, arrogant assumption on my part, but I'll put it out there. Well done, it felt more complete this way.
FallenMetalGod
Thank you, and it seems like the Red Priestess is trying to spread her influence and claws. Let's hope Rhaella can survive or gain some influence. However, it also seems like she stumbled upon something big while in the body of the Raven. I am curious, was it Bran or maybe a young Garth Greenhand? I do hope the Old Gods do give Rhaella a fighting chance against this 'Melony'. I feel like things will become far more interesting. I do hope Aegon isn't doing something foolish with Melisandre. I like the idea that the Unlikely wouldn't cheat on his wife with someone else. I like how Jon is starting to learn and become a better version of himself under Bloodraven's mentorship. I am curious what sort of Jon we will see once he goes South. Great job as always, and I can't wait to see what happens next.
Michael Rojas
Also it's obvious that melony of lys is definitely Melisandre right? By most definitions, including mine, she's kind of evil and deserves death. She is usually a great pain in ass anyway, and i doubt she is going to believe that Others got ganked without her direct or indirect interference. Not sure if she's responsible for all the dead servants. Could also be that they were all spies anyway, not enough information yet make a decision. Am I missing anything there?
Daniel Morgan
Why do you test me? Every week I wait 168 hours between chapters for a 30 minute read. I NEED MOOOAAAARRRR!!!!!
Brewt
Curious about who the two conspirators are. My first thought was varys and Co but they're far too young. Regardless solid chapter some solid groundwork for what is rapidly becoming something I look forward to reading every week.
Eric Lachance
That new maid from Lys is pretty sharp! Is it sharp enough to cut? Remains to be seen.
Bovragor
I love it. The story and pacing is good. And the plot with its eldritch undercurrents has me hooked :D
nikos konteles
Don’t know , just don’t feel it ! Is not like the story is bad I just find the whole importance of rhaella unnecessary or should I call it underwhelming?! To much mysteries in the Targaryen family , but where is the base for that ?? Cause canon is for sure not !! What change so much so Melisandre came to the king ?? Is just feel random out of context!
Forest
The plot thickens. I'm curious about the differences and similarities between Bloodraven and Whitedream. It seems as though Whitedream was Bloodraven's predecessor. Someone who fade into the weirwood roots leaving a spot for Bloodraven to take over, which bears the question if he's the original three- eyed crow. i'm loving the development of this and how Rhaella and Jon are being taught by different masters very useful skills better to steer destiny with or be steered by it.
stevem1
Great chapter. Aegon apparently is deep into his delusion that R’hllor can help him wake dragons. His arrogance is astounding. Jon being trained by Bloodraven is very cool. But it is very suspicious that Brynden Rivers appears so honest. He’s direct and to the point. Like a Northman. Where is his scheming? What is his plot? Both Rhaella and Jon are in close proximity to sorcerers. Neither is a good thing for long term mental health.
