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A Helping Hand - Page 9 - Inks
🕑 Added 2018-06-15 02:09:30 +0000 UTC Think I've finally settled on a way of doing lettering that works for me. From now on it'll just be a matter of practice and cleaning it up, but I don't look at it and hate myself anymore. The bubbles themselves need a bit of work but I think I'll have that mostly fixed in another few pages.I think I mentioned earlier that I was planning originally on having Gale wearing either nothing or a corset or something like that, but didn't want to have to sidetrack everything to explain why it's okay to have him wearing that around in public. Gale's chastity cage is another one of those things I couldn't really get away with just glossing over, it really seems like something the characters would bring up, but I couldn't just avoid this one like I did the clothing, so I take a bit of time here to talk about it.
Seems like Gale is a bit of a sap. Blue on the other hand is just vulgar...
Comments
Ruaidri
Thanks! :D Drawing characters in motion is still pretty new to me and I'm finding it pretty difficult, so it's always nice to hear when I get a part of it to look half decent. Yeah, Gale has always had a short sleeve over a long sleeve. But you're right, adding in a little bit of that short sleeve poking down would make it a bit more clear- I've added it into the ink, should be in the final version. For #3, he was just given an order so I was just going for an initial submissive reaction sorta deal... might have overdone it a touch. Gonna be honest, not sure what you mean for #1, honestly I was just planning on doing a wash BG for that panel so there won't be much perspective at all. x3
Bloudin Ruo
Love the dialogue in #5; "...only he has my key", somewhat symbolizes they have more under the surface, and that both very much enjoy each other :) I also love, in the same panel, the 'in motion' rendition of Gale undressing, I think you nailed the elasticity of his under-layer very well. I also think you've made loads of progress on your text clarity and speech bubbles! Things I noticed: In panel #4, Gale's over-shirt suddenly has long sleeves, wherein all the other panels, and other pages, you've had that shirt as short sleeved. In panel #3, I'm not quite sure what expression Gale is putting on, and I know you'll refine it in the color, but what were you wanting to portray on him in that panel? It feels a little more like fear than timidity or submissiveness, in my opinion. The other thing would be that if you nail it, the perspective on #1 is going to be very cool! I don't think you've done very many 'looking-down-the-nose' shots before, and I'm excited to see how you tackle it. Ah, as an edit, I think I see how Gale's clothing is working in #4, where I said he suddenly grew long sleeves. What we're seeing on his arms is still his stretchy under-shirt, right? The short sleeves are above the frame and not rendered? I believe adding in those sleeves to the panel would still be good for the continuity, though.
