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The Wanderer - 100

🕑 Added 2022-11-25 02:42:12 +0000 UTC

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frank ivkovich

That was the cutest thing emma has done

You may be right, I will try to keep an eye on that. It's difficult to keep track of such things without input from others, so thanks for the comment. I will try to give the plot more prominence in the coming chapters, or at least find a better balance.

Rakeido

Honestly, I somewhat agree with the general sentiment. But I don’t think it’s the lack of action that’s the issue. The sex scenes, at first, were interesting, different, and a surprising gimmick. Until it feels like it’s 40% of what you wrote. Chapters upon chapters with more than half of the content filled with smut, after a few times, becomes laborious and boring. I definitely understand that you’re using it as a tool to justify the both of them falling in love so soon and so fast, but honestly, with it happening so many times it feels like a chore to read. It doesn’t have to be action. Politics, mind games, cold wars, anything that has actual tangible content that moves the story along works. Even the small ‘family’ subtext. It’s more suitable to use those intimate moments only when it’s truly needed imo, otherwise, just a hint or a few sentences to describe what happened and one extremely detailed one when it truly matters every once in a while.


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