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Chapter 5: Getting Good

🕑 Added 2023-05-21 17:17:32 +0000 UTC

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Greekfirefly

Just looked back and your right it is called a perk. I guess I missed that bit when I read the auto corrected area. Also I was mainly trying to say that the MC should say “Huh, so I can get perks that way huh?” As the MC was referring to the perk as a spell.

BronzDeck

Thanks for pointing it out my autocorrect changed way to was. And it is called perk if I am seeing it correctly

Greekfirefly

Great chapter, just noticed this and wanted to point it out, “Huh, so I can get spells that was huh?” Two things from this bit, one the spellcaster buff would more commonly be called a perk as it was gained after having so much of a certain stat in this case Int. Secondly I would change the ‘was’ into a ‘way’ so that it reads out “Huh, so I can get spells that way huh?” Which makes more sense. Another thing I guess I would change after saying all that is the ‘spells’ but instead say ‘perks’ as that is what the spellcaster buff is

BronzDeck

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James French

Sorry for being that guy again but- minor sentence issue right after our mc gets the new poison dagger I would change it to say ‘even if my* Tozama’ instead of the double ‘was’ (Thanks for the new chap btw!!)


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